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Drawn In To Die

Midnight in village, No moon, no power, Lamp lit up by granny Flickered with hope; Lured by its flame, Moths spiral around, Making loops and coils Only to get burnt. Date: 06/17/2021 For Workshop: Adjectives Deleted Poetry Contest Sponsor: Jack Webster

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Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/12/2021 2:20:00 AM

Coming back to congratulate you. Hearing from you after a long time. Missing your poems.

Malabika Ray Choudhury

Date: 7/3/2021 5:31:00 PM

Dear Ani, a powerful picture of a natural sight of doom - portrayed realistically without using any adjectives - a challenge met convincingly. Love and best wishes ~ Mala

Susan Ashley

Date: 7/3/2021 12:46:00 PM

Dearest Ani, your splendid pen portrays a beguiling fatal attraction. The beauty of false hope is an alluring doom for some. A pensive and poignant piece that is potent even without adjectives - such is the lovely strength and artistry of your poetic gift. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you, my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Jcb Brul

Date: 7/3/2021 6:34:00 AM

Very powerful sans adjectives! A fav for me!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/1/2021 10:47:00 PM

Yeah, I can see that, well written, Anitha:)

Juliet Ligon

Date: 6/29/2021 10:57:00 AM

I can picture the scene, even with adjectives deleted.

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 6/29/2021 8:14:00 AM

Hi! How are you? Back from Chennai I presume as schools have started. How is your mother in law? Glad to see you back. Looking forward to reading your lovely poems.

Anitha Jayasankar
Date: 6/29/2021 10:46:00 AM

Hi.. yes am back to Mumbai.. Thank you Rama

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/25/2021 9:24:00 AM

Very good work, Anitha. I hope to see you on the winners' list. I know how much you miss writing and I hope you will be able to do more and more!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 6/22/2021 10:18:00 AM

Yeah, moths usually get burnt. A beautiful depiction.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/22/2021 3:01:00 AM

- A brutal death ... great written, dear Ani :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - I miss reading and writing ... but I'm too tired ... after my second operation in a short time - (the medicine makes me tired and dizzy) - I'm much better, but not quite ready to write poems :) - Have a lovely day, no one is forgotten :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Quoth Theraven

Date: 6/21/2021 8:57:00 AM

Anitha, Loveliness in contemplation in a poem's moonless night. Attraction to a flickering beauty, surely no better way to die. -Richard

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/17/2021 1:30:00 AM

Quite common these days. Outages take place all the time. Very picturesque. Hugs.