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Drawn In To Die

Midnight in village, 
No moon, no power, 
Lamp lit up by granny
Flickered with hope;

Lured by its flame, 
Moths spiral around, 
Making loops and coils
Only to get burnt.


Date: 06/17/2021
For Workshop: Adjectives Deleted Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Jack Webster

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Christuraj Alex

July 12, 2021 at 2:20 AM

Coming back to congratulate you. Hearing from you after a long time. Missing your poems.

Malabika Ray Choudhury

July 3, 2021 at 5:31 PM

Dear Ani, a powerful picture of a natural sight of doom - portrayed realistically without using any adjectives - a challenge met convincingly. Love and best wishes ~ Mala

Susan Ashley

July 3, 2021 at 12:46 PM

Dearest Ani, your splendid pen portrays a beguiling fatal attraction. The beauty of false hope is an alluring doom for some. A pensive and poignant piece that is potent even without adjectives - such is the lovely strength and artistry of your poetic gift. Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes for you, my sweet friend.. ~Susan

JC Brul

July 3, 2021 at 6:34 AM

Very powerful sans adjectives! A fav for me!

Joanna Daniel

July 1, 2021 at 10:47 PM

Yeah, I can see that, well written, Anitha:)

Juliet Ligon

June 29, 2021 at 10:57 AM

I can picture the scene, even with adjectives deleted.

Rama Balasubramanian

June 29, 2021 at 8:14 AM

Hi! How are you? Back from Chennai I presume as schools have started. How is your mother in law? Glad to see you back. Looking forward to reading your lovely poems.

Anitha Jayasankar

June 29, 2021 at 10:46 AM

Hi.. yes am back to Mumbai.. Thank you Rama

Andrea Dietrich

June 25, 2021 at 9:24 AM

Very good work, Anitha. I hope to see you on the winners' list. I know how much you miss writing and I hope you will be able to do more and more!

Christuraj Alex

June 22, 2021 at 10:18 AM

Yeah, moths usually get burnt. A beautiful depiction.

Anne-Lise Andresen

June 22, 2021 at 3:01 AM

- A brutal death ... great written, dear Ani :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - I miss reading and writing ... but I'm too tired ... after my second operation in a short time - (the medicine makes me tired and dizzy) - I'm much better, but not quite ready to write poems :) - Have a lovely day, no one is forgotten :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)