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Downtown Blues

Scalding hot The melting pot City slickers With knotted knickers Traffic jams Slaughter of lambs Put up a fight Speed of light Amidst the rat race Within reach a can of mace Keeping up Got bumped up Then retired Just got too tired AP: Honorable Mention 2020 Posted on March 6, 2019

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M. L. Kiser

Date: 3/8/2019 10:08:00 AM

Whew! I am exhausted now; no wonder you're tired. Great one!

Line Gauthier
Date: 3/8/2019 10:47:00 AM

Not missing the rat race for a second.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/7/2019 5:38:00 AM

Line, downtown blues happen daily for me on the way to work when thousands of commuters have to get through one tiny strip of road to go under the one laned underpass from three lanes. It is a nightmare. Which is why I leave home an hour too soon. Less of the others.

Line Gauthier
Date: 3/7/2019 9:01:00 AM

Glad you found a way to get around it, Caren.

Timothy Mcguire

Date: 3/7/2019 1:06:00 AM

I'm right there too, three more years. I like the line "knotted Knickers" I don't think I would like knotted knickers but I like the line!

Line Gauthier
Date: 3/7/2019 1:32:00 AM

Ever hear the expression "Don't get your knickers in a knot"? LOL

Janice Canerdy

Date: 3/6/2019 6:00:00 PM

Excellent, rollicking, well-written, Line. Janice

Line Gauthier
Date: 3/6/2019 6:49:00 PM

Thank you so much, Janice. Most appreciated.