Doowoo On the Train

i lay back
head on the rack
had my napp sack
they came in
you could hear the blend
i got hook  it took
my mind off other things
it was
DOOWOO ON THE TRAIN
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Branham Avatar
May 1, 2012 at 4:44 PM
I liked the strength evolved in this piece. At first the reader is not sure who the 'you' is and assumes you are speaking about the reader - the surprise comes at the end when finding it is 'God' you are speaking of. Well done.
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