Don'T You See Me?

It starts out slow, just a few drops, drip…drip… and then it lets go, as if the flood
gates opened, it starts to flow.
Gushing now, nowhere to go, I am so exposed!
Abandoned out here all alone.
Am I dead? I feel so low, do you see me?
This can’t be so, don’t you see me?
I am standing in the rain soaked from head to toe.
Screaming out! 
I see you there looking right through me!
Where should I go…home? Where is home? I am stranded here!
I look up in the night sky searching for a reason why!
I swear if you look hard enough you can see inside.
Drip…drip… It’s pouring now!
I am afraid!
Is this it?
Do I lay down now?
I see you, don’t you see me?
I am exposed this is me!
Raw as I can be!
Am I dead?
Or are you?
This rain you feel, these drops that are falling, it is my pain rushing down, down hitting
the ground!
Smashing into nothing!
Crashing into nothing!
Being felt by no one, I see you but you don’t see me.
The rain that is falling are my tears calling out to you, hear me please!
These drops that are falling are what aches inside of me.
This is the storm that you have created!
The thunder and lightning are the intervals that I breathe, in the way it sneaks in a
rumble and than a crash!
That is me; do you see me at last?
No I am not dead, this hurt I feel, these tears that are falling it is what’s inside of me. 
I am not ashamed!
You have broken who I thought I was!
As I stand here alone and feel the tears stream down my face, I know now you don’t see me
but I am sure you feel the fall of the rain.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Agustin Avatar
April 20, 2026 at 7:57 AM
Thanks for sharing this... exposing your thoughts through your unique poetic style. Meanwhile, I greet you with the love of the Lord, expressed by John 3:16 of the Bible, "For God so loved the world, that he gave his only begotten Son, that whosoever believeth in him should not perish, but have everlasting life." Be blessed.
A   Avatar
March 12, 2016 at 10:49 AM
Amanda Andrews, Enjoyed the way you expressed every line. Please keep writing, hope to see a new one from you again. LOVE LINDA
A  Avatar
July 21, 2015 at 4:32 PM
AMAZING...SK
Palli Avatar
November 14, 2010 at 10:09 AM
Could feel the emotions.
Thomer Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 3:25 PM
a well crafted and beautiful poem, with great images and emotions. well done on this one and welcome to the soup :). --Madison
Coulstock Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 9:34 AM
Amanda,This is so beautifully written and so sad.I was touched so much it saddened me.So many people walk around with their pain,perhaps unnoticed or no-one to share it with.You have captured the feelings so well.I think this is incredible.I sincerely hope the pain is not your own.Thank you for sharing this wonderful poetry Love June(sylvia)
Mehta Avatar
November 3, 2010 at 9:32 AM
Frustrations sometimes come in everybody's life, but you have to be brave enough to face them, Amanda
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