Black Eyed Susan Poet Verse

Don'T Look Away

The sizzling heat between us
Like lightening on a summer day,
Or sudden exploding wind gusts
Sweeping our bodies astray,
Speaking what our mouths won’t say
I can see it there in your eyes
Flaming, before you look away,
And pretend I’m one of the guys


7/31/11

Received 9th place in "hutain this one" contest

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Andrea Dietrich February 19, 2013 at 7:57 AM Loving this poem again!! And susan, I came here to tell you: WOW, I am really glad you liked my hotel poem. I was so afraid it was mine that you had said had an ending you did not like!! Hope to hear from you soon. time to get out the door!!

Lee Ramage August 4, 2011 at 8:51 PM Very nice. Congratulations on your placing. Lee

Dr.Ram Mehta August 4, 2011 at 1:39 PM Congratulations on the win in the contest of nette, Susan

Jack Horne August 4, 2011 at 11:47 AM Wow, so many contest results again! Many congrats for all your wins : )

Carol Sunshine Brown August 4, 2011 at 9:30 AM Congratulations on your placement in Nette's "Hutain" contest Susan Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich August 3, 2011 at 11:56 PM Congratulations, Susan. For once, romance was unique in this contest. I think only yours was about passion!! soupmail

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 3, 2011 at 5:47 PM Congrats Susan on an exciting win in Hutain contest with these amazing lines of poetry my friend.. kudos to u luv..

Caryl Ramsdale August 3, 2011 at 3:37 PM Congratulations on your win in the HUTAIN THIS ONE...contest sponsored by Nette Onclaud. Good job! Blessings, Caryl

Carolyn Devonshire August 1, 2011 at 4:15 PM Awesome, passionate hutain, Susan. It's been a long time for me, but you brought the "sizzling heat" back for me. Had to chuckle at the last two lines. Wishing you success in the contest. And thanks for your comments about spraying mace in the possessive man's face. Had fun writing that one. Love, carolyn

Andrea Dietrich August 1, 2011 at 10:15 AM OH, with a little twist at the end. you did VERY nicely with this one, Susan, and I am sure Netter will like it. LUv, Andrea

Judy Ball July 31, 2011 at 9:47 PM Nicely done my friend. Dontcha just hate when that happens? ;) Really good imagery here. God Bless, JB

Dr.Ram Mehta July 31, 2011 at 9:07 PM Wonderful entry to the contest, susan