Jan Allison Poet Triolet

Do You Love Me

You told me simply we were friends
But you conceal your aching heart
My love for you it never ends
You told me simply we were friends
Dreaming of you my heart ascends
Forbidden love keeps us apart
You told me simply we were friends
But you conceal your aching heart


09~26~14
Written for One New Triolet Contest
Sponsored By Alfred Vassallo

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Paul Callus September 28, 2014 at 2:02 PM This is what forbidden love does....it evokes such deep and strong poetic emotions; well done Jan on your first Triolet. gl in contest. hugs // paul Jan Allison September 28, 2014 at 2:14 PM Thanks Paul:-) hugs Jan xxx

Liam Mcdaid September 27, 2014 at 11:28 PM this is so very deep beautiful i know exactly that feeling so confusing excellent piece of writing thumbs up Jan Allison September 28, 2014 at 3:02 AM Thanks for the lovely comment Liam:-) hugs Jan xxx

Matthew Anish September 27, 2014 at 7:59 PM Friends or lovers - both are precious and can cause great joy and sorrow in one's life. Good luck in the contest. I have never tried this form - maybe I will soon - you handle it well. Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison September 28, 2014 at 3:02 AM Its my first attempt at this form Matthew - have a go its not as scary as it looks at first:-) Hugs jan xxx

Carmen Sunshine September 27, 2014 at 7:09 PM lovely... thanks for sharing and inspiring ! Jan Allison September 27, 2014 at 7:10 PM thanks for dropping by Carmen:-) hugs Jan xxx

Regina Mcintosh September 27, 2014 at 11:26 AM I hope you win. I've never written a triolet. I might try... Love and prayers, Gina Jan Allison September 27, 2014 at 11:28 AM Its my first attempt - Brenda inspired me to have a go:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Sara Kendrick September 27, 2014 at 5:35 AM Ahh!! Reads like a winner to me..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visit by my page..Sara Jan Allison September 27, 2014 at 7:50 AM Thanks Sara:-) Hugs jan xxx

M. L. Kiser September 26, 2014 at 2:30 PM A very honest and heartfelt Triolet. Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 2:35 PM I'm so pleased my first attempt is having such wonderful feedback :-) thank so much for commenting:-) hugs Jan xxx

Dorian Petersen Potter September 26, 2014 at 1:02 PM Very powerful Triolet! I am floored with this one, in a nice way. Wow! Great triolet Jan! I wish you all the best my sweet friend Jan! Good luck in this contest! Love and light! And many hugs! xxxx D. Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 1:14 PM I'm so pleased with the feedback I've had Dorian its my first attempt at this form:-) Hugs j Jan xxx

Liam Mcdaid September 26, 2014 at 12:59 PM truly very beautifully painted piece jan excellent pen god bless Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 1:12 PM Thanks so much Liam:-) hugs Jan xxx

Nette Onclaud September 26, 2014 at 12:37 PM enjoyed your languid piece.. sentimentality at its beat, jan.. hugggs Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 1:09 PM thanks so much for dropping by Nette:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Dan Kearley September 26, 2014 at 12:18 PM Very nice write Jan... Thank you for stopping by. I'm sorry if my last poem upset you. They were just the words that came to me that day. Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 1:09 PM no worries Dan we all produce emotive writes and its a good way of expressing ourselves:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma September 26, 2014 at 11:04 AM Words are less to appreciate the beauty n emotion in this eloquent write Jan! Sure to fly high! Still best wishes! Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 11:24 AM Thanks Dr Sharma I am so happy with my first triloet:-) hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne September 26, 2014 at 10:00 AM Excellent! This will place high in the contest. Poor Tim and now everybody knows. Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 5:25 PM I never kiss and tell:-) Hugs JAN xx Tim Smith September 26, 2014 at 5:11 PM Wait....what?....She told me this was about you :) Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 10:10 AM Behave Maurice! Darren will divorce me and leave me with two babies when he reads your comment ... and here was me hoping we would have a third as soon as he is back on the scene :-( Hugs Jan xxx

Harry Horsman September 26, 2014 at 9:27 AM wow with poetry as good as this,,,it is so hard to resist the title,, good luck in contest... Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 9:29 AM Thank you so much Harry I am amazed at the feedback on my first triolet:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Brenda Meier-Hans September 26, 2014 at 8:52 AM Wow, great job Jan. We'd never know that this is your first Triolet, I'm so proud of you. Brenda Meier-Hans September 26, 2014 at 9:05 AM Wow, you are amazing. Thanks so much I luv you my isle of England girl. Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 8:58 AM YOU inspired me to have a go Brenda - thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith September 26, 2014 at 7:43 AM This amazing Jan....I really love it :)..... Hugs Tim Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 8:17 AM Thanks as ever Tim:-) hugs Jan xxx

Ma Yaseen September 26, 2014 at 7:24 AM nicely done Jan, a lively poem.... Excellent Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 8:17 AM Thanks Malik its my first attempt at a triolet:-) Hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance September 26, 2014 at 7:20 AM I knew it! You are great! This did turn out fantastic my friend :) good luck in the contest! Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 8:17 AM Aww thanks Casarah - am so pleased with my first attempt:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Dr.Ram Mehta September 26, 2014 at 6:31 AM Pleasing rhyming and perfect write on sad love, good luck, Jan Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 8:16 AM Thank you so much Dr Mehta - it's my first attempt at this form:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Charmaine Chircop September 26, 2014 at 6:16 AM Ahh that forbidden love,always ache the heart, especially the honest heart sweet lady.An excellent sentimental poem my dear. Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 8:15 AM Thanks Charmaine for the lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis September 26, 2014 at 5:14 AM How many times does it happen? Innumerable times and that is human! Wonderful Triolet, dear Jan, good luck on the contest! Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 8:15 AM Thanks Demetrios it's my first attempt at this form I am delighted to have so much feedback:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Eileen Manassian September 26, 2014 at 5:03 AM Lovely write, Jan. Good luck on the contest, my dear. Forbidden love can be bitter sweet. Jan Allison September 26, 2014 at 8:14 AM Ohhh I wondered where you were Eileen - welcome back again have missed your smile:-) Hugs Jan xx