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Do You Love Me

You told me simply we were friends
But you conceal your aching heart
My love for you it never ends
You told me simply we were friends
Dreaming of you my heart ascends
Forbidden love keeps us apart
You told me simply we were friends
But you conceal your aching heart


09~26~14
Written for One New Triolet Contest
Sponsored By Alfred Vassallo

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2014

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Paul Callus Date: 9/28/2014 2:02:00 PM This is what forbidden love does....it evokes such deep and strong poetic emotions; well done Jan on your first Triolet. gl in contest. hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/28/2014 2:14:00 PM Thanks Paul:-) hugs Jan xxx

Liam Mcdaid Date: 9/27/2014 11:28:00 PM this is so very deep beautiful i know exactly that feeling so confusing excellent piece of writing thumbs up Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/28/2014 3:02:00 AM Thanks for the lovely comment Liam:-) hugs Jan xxx

Matthew Anish Date: 9/27/2014 7:59:00 PM Friends or lovers - both are precious and can cause great joy and sorrow in one's life. Good luck in the contest. I have never tried this form - maybe I will soon - you handle it well. Peace & Love Matthew Anish Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/28/2014 3:02:00 AM Its my first attempt at this form Matthew - have a go its not as scary as it looks at first:-) Hugs jan xxx

Carmen Sunshine Date: 9/27/2014 7:09:00 PM lovely... thanks for sharing and inspiring ! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/27/2014 7:10:00 PM thanks for dropping by Carmen:-) hugs Jan xxx

Regina Mcintosh Date: 9/27/2014 11:26:00 AM I hope you win. I've never written a triolet. I might try... Love and prayers, Gina Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/27/2014 11:28:00 AM Its my first attempt - Brenda inspired me to have a go:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Sara Kendrick Date: 9/27/2014 5:35:00 AM Ahh!! Reads like a winner to me..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visit by my page..Sara Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/27/2014 7:50:00 AM Thanks Sara:-) Hugs jan xxx

M. L. Kiser Date: 9/26/2014 2:30:00 PM A very honest and heartfelt Triolet. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 2:35:00 PM I'm so pleased my first attempt is having such wonderful feedback :-) thank so much for commenting:-) hugs Jan xxx

Dorian Petersen Potter Date: 9/26/2014 1:02:00 PM Very powerful Triolet! I am floored with this one, in a nice way. Wow! Great triolet Jan! I wish you all the best my sweet friend Jan! Good luck in this contest! Love and light! And many hugs! xxxx D. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 1:14:00 PM I'm so pleased with the feedback I've had Dorian its my first attempt at this form:-) Hugs j Jan xxx

Liam Mcdaid Date: 9/26/2014 12:59:00 PM truly very beautifully painted piece jan excellent pen god bless Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 1:12:00 PM Thanks so much Liam:-) hugs Jan xxx

Nette Onclaud Date: 9/26/2014 12:37:00 PM enjoyed your languid piece.. sentimentality at its beat, jan.. hugggs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 1:09:00 PM thanks so much for dropping by Nette:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Dan Kearley Date: 9/26/2014 12:18:00 PM Very nice write Jan... Thank you for stopping by. I'm sorry if my last poem upset you. They were just the words that came to me that day. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 1:09:00 PM no worries Dan we all produce emotive writes and its a good way of expressing ourselves:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 9/26/2014 11:04:00 AM Words are less to appreciate the beauty n emotion in this eloquent write Jan! Sure to fly high! Still best wishes! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 11:24:00 AM Thanks Dr Sharma I am so happy with my first triloet:-) hugs Jan xxx

Maurice Yvonne Date: 9/26/2014 10:00:00 AM Excellent! This will place high in the contest. Poor Tim and now everybody knows. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 5:25:00 PM I never kiss and tell:-) Hugs JAN xx Tim Smith Date: 9/26/2014 5:11:00 PM Wait....what?....She told me this was about you :) Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 10:10:00 AM Behave Maurice! Darren will divorce me and leave me with two babies when he reads your comment ... and here was me hoping we would have a third as soon as he is back on the scene :-( Hugs Jan xxx

Harry Horsman Date: 9/26/2014 9:27:00 AM wow with poetry as good as this,,,it is so hard to resist the title,, good luck in contest... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 9:29:00 AM Thank you so much Harry I am amazed at the feedback on my first triolet:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/26/2014 8:52:00 AM Wow, great job Jan. We'd never know that this is your first Triolet, I'm so proud of you. Login to Reply Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 9/26/2014 9:05:00 AM Wow, you are amazing. Thanks so much I luv you my isle of England girl. Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 8:58:00 AM YOU inspired me to have a go Brenda - thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith Date: 9/26/2014 7:43:00 AM This amazing Jan....I really love it :)..... Hugs Tim Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 8:17:00 AM Thanks as ever Tim:-) hugs Jan xxx

Ma Yaseen Date: 9/26/2014 7:24:00 AM nicely done Jan, a lively poem.... Excellent Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 8:17:00 AM Thanks Malik its my first attempt at a triolet:-) Hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance Date: 9/26/2014 7:20:00 AM I knew it! You are great! This did turn out fantastic my friend :) good luck in the contest! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 8:17:00 AM Aww thanks Casarah - am so pleased with my first attempt:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 9/26/2014 6:31:00 AM Pleasing rhyming and perfect write on sad love, good luck, Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 8:16:00 AM Thank you so much Dr Mehta - it's my first attempt at this form:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Charmaine Chircop Date: 9/26/2014 6:16:00 AM Ahh that forbidden love,always ache the heart, especially the honest heart sweet lady.An excellent sentimental poem my dear. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 8:15:00 AM Thanks Charmaine for the lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 9/26/2014 5:14:00 AM How many times does it happen? Innumerable times and that is human! Wonderful Triolet, dear Jan, good luck on the contest! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 8:15:00 AM Thanks Demetrios it's my first attempt at this form I am delighted to have so much feedback:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Eileen Manassian Date: 9/26/2014 5:03:00 AM Lovely write, Jan. Good luck on the contest, my dear. Forbidden love can be bitter sweet. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2014 8:14:00 AM Ohhh I wondered where you were Eileen - welcome back again have missed your smile:-) Hugs Jan xx