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Dizzy was Quiet For Good Reason

Dizzy was a quiet man, for a good reason.
He kept his past to himself, not wanting to scare people.
Prison had made him more silent than ever.
He had given it twenty years of his life.

He had a comfortable place now, 
Rented sure, but it was safe.
No one bothered him.
The police had stopped too.

His wife and daughter long gone, 
There was no one left.  
He patted his denim pocket.
Making sure his deck was there.

He liked playing cards with people in the park.
They enjoyed it too, and it gave him a little cash.
A left over deck from the Dunes, his go-to place
When his wife threw him out, because of his drinking.

He had not had a drink for years,
Too late for them; she had cut him out of their lives years ago.
A young man with a pretty girl approached from the side.
“Dad?” the girl asked.  He pretended to not know her.  It was easier.

Written 9-3-2019
Contest: Bring a Character to Life (Dizzy)
Sponsor: Richard Lamoureux

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019




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Date: 9/8/2019 6:19:00 AM
Congratulations and love this. It's truly a work of art. Blessings
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/8/2019 6:59:00 PM
Thank you Regina. I had fun figuring this one out!
Date: 9/8/2019 12:37:00 AM
This is so good, congrats on your first place. Thanks for entering my contest.
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/8/2019 6:59:00 PM
Thank you so much Richard. I am humbly honored.
Date: 9/7/2019 8:57:00 PM
Congratulations on this fictional write. Hugs Eve
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/7/2019 10:16:00 PM
Thank you so much Eve. I am glad that you stopped by.
Date: 9/7/2019 6:48:00 PM
Oh Caren...I hadn't read this one and it is so powerful...the ending was a surprise. Well penned my poet friend! Congrats on your first place.
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/7/2019 10:20:00 PM
Thank you Jeanne. I was hoping to surprise people with the ending.
Date: 9/7/2019 4:25:00 PM
Mmmmelodrama. I got no problem with good melodramas) Gongrats on you golden top, Caren.
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/7/2019 10:20:00 PM
Thank you Kurt. I am enjoying this today for sure!
Date: 9/7/2019 3:53:00 PM
great story telling Caren, i felt sorry for his daughter, but get the reasoning... congrats on your win :)
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/7/2019 10:20:00 PM
Thank you so much Sandra.
Date: 9/7/2019 2:53:00 PM
awesome I can see why it took top notch sweet Caren! Congrats on your well deserved win :)-luloo
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/7/2019 10:21:00 PM
Thank you Lu Loo. I was surprised for sure. There were so many terrific entries. I almost did not enter this one.
Date: 9/4/2019 1:27:00 PM
Excellent Very Nice...Wish you well in the contest Seems like I know ole Dizzy... James
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Caren Krutsinger
Date: 9/4/2019 9:56:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by James. I think we may all know him.