Distances

Distances Your day will pass and I will sleep strange these balance's of things remain apart like a jet lag of life impersonates my heart

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Sue Mason

Date: 5/2/2009 9:59:00 AM

Very interesting write here, Colin. Love how the title weaves through those things that remain apart ... smile ... the last two lines are awesome !

Tevin Wilson16yahoo.Com

Date: 4/30/2009 10:13:00 PM

wow

Laurie Ginn

Date: 4/29/2009 3:56:00 AM

I was just thinking about this yesterday. First of all I think sleep is an odd thing, sort of a self hibernation, and half the world is awake while the other plots and plans and goes on with life. Short sweet and reflective.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/28/2009 2:47:00 PM

What a clever comparison -- "like a jet lag of life." Excellent!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/28/2009 2:23:00 PM

WONDERFUL WRITE-CHARMA

Christopher Higgins

Date: 4/28/2009 2:13:00 PM

Distance is an illusion that cripples the heart from taking action....love the write.

Miss Freedom

Date: 4/28/2009 1:59:00 PM

short and strong. well done.

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/28/2009 1:27:00 PM

Colin, this poem took a bite out of my brain-pattern! nice!! love it, Jim