Disdain of Words Formed Just So

They are packaged neatly in this form for you
Just so you know I disdain it, this form you choose
Forever keeps me guessing at how I'll lose
Guess on says you, guess again says I, cause 

Weakness betrays this poet, and it betrays the
Exhibitors of kindness.  I see your weakness
Punctuated at the end of a sentence.

Slays a dragon and steals the treasure to repent,
That's what this warrior did, i'll never conform
To your form the way you'd like. Devil may 
Come a nockin on yer door dear though if
Ya strike.  Strike me down with your disdain
But I'll come back and I'll always complain.

I disdain your little form, and at last I punctuate this with a storm!
For is it not the antithesis of the way I feel?

This poem will refuse to relocate itself, but It will infuse itself in your memory' in the hopes that you will find it very, very, very grammatically incorrect;
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011


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Date: 7/28/2011 10:42:00 PM
Love that "slays the dragon " part. Nice verse!
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Date: 7/28/2011 1:13:00 PM
Tim, I love free verse, but also prefer it with limited punctuation. We betray ourselves when we feel this way and use periods in free verse. It's not grammatically incorrect, but I love the message. Free verse should be "free" forms of expresssion. I share your angst and it comes through very well in this powerful write. thanks for your kind comments. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 7/28/2011 2:11:00 PM
True, I think honestly it has a very limited place in poetry overall, even in other forms. I have started using it more and more and I am trying to ween myself back off of it!
Date: 7/27/2011 10:14:00 PM
wow Tim this is wonderfully written with great emotion and fervor luv.. enjoyed this creative adventure ..
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Date: 7/28/2011 12:49:00 PM
Too kind Mrs Linda, but much appreciated :). This was just me venting and ranting like a brat.
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