Diastole

Even at the point of relaxation, there is pressure. Even when my thoughts wander, my heart remains with you.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/27/2014 6:25:00 PM

wow, profound one. Interesting one. Congrats for your win. this was very good.

D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/28/2014 9:33:00 AM

Thanks Andrea, I tweaked it again as is my wont, bringing heart into the last line.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/27/2014 5:59:00 AM

Soft feelings nicely penned, Aberfoyle. congrats

D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/28/2014 9:33:00 AM

Thanks Dr. Mehta

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/26/2014 9:51:00 PM

Aberfoyle :) Congratulations! Thank you for supporting my under 5 lines or less contest. Enjoy my blog "One Hard Word" when and if you have time. Always ~ LINDA ~

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 8/10/2014 1:53:00 AM

Like it..:) sweet one!

D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/10/2014 9:40:00 AM

Thanks Olive

D.W. Rodgers

Date: 8/8/2014 10:36:00 AM

This is really a 4 line poem with breaks after commas and periods. For unknown reasons, and despite repeated attempts at editing, the Soup machine is making it a 6 line poem.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/8/2014 6:20:00 AM

Nice introspective expressions with sentiments, Aberfoyle

D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/8/2014 10:22:00 AM

Thanks Dr. M

Jeremy Martin

Date: 8/7/2014 10:32:00 PM

A very tender and well-written poem. I love how the simplicity of the words match the simple but powerful sentiment. Great work.

D.W. Rodgers
Date: 8/8/2014 10:21:00 AM

Thanks Jeremy