Diastole

Even at the point of  relaxation, 
there is pressure.
Even when my thoughts wander,
my heart remains with you.

introspectionfree verse

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Andrea Dietrich

August 27, 2014 at 6:25 PM

wow, profound one. Interesting one. Congrats for your win. this was very good.

D.W. Rodgers

August 28, 2014 at 9:33 AM

Thanks Andrea, I tweaked it again as is my wont, bringing heart into the last line.

Dr.Ram Mehta

August 27, 2014 at 5:59 AM

Soft feelings nicely penned, Aberfoyle. congrats

D.W. Rodgers

August 28, 2014 at 9:33 AM

Thanks Dr. Mehta

Poet Destroyer A

August 26, 2014 at 9:51 PM

Aberfoyle :) Congratulations! Thank you for supporting my under 5 lines or less contest. Enjoy my blog "One Hard Word" when and if you have time. Always ~ LINDA ~

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

August 10, 2014 at 1:53 AM

Like it..:) sweet one!

D.W. Rodgers

August 10, 2014 at 9:40 AM

Thanks Olive

D.W. Rodgers

August 8, 2014 at 10:36 AM

This is really a 4 line poem with breaks after commas and periods. For unknown reasons, and despite repeated attempts at editing, the Soup machine is making it a 6 line poem.