Paul Callus Poet Rhyme

Diamond Dust, Devil

Fighting for survival far away from home
With my cloak and dagger where the devils roam
Lurking in the darkness that conceals the night
There belong the phantoms well beyond my sight.
All my strength is seeping, bleeding wound is sore
I won’t last much longer, I will hide no more.
Now the wind is howling; let it groan and blow
Lifeless, right beside me, lies my vanquished foe. 


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Contest: Diamond Dust, Devil
Sponsor: Skat A
Placing: 3rd

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Poet Destroyer A May 31, 2014 at 8:17 AM Paul, I enjoy having your words on my comment.. thank you..Linda

Poet Destroyer A May 29, 2014 at 6:50 PM PAUL, , EPIC WRITE, EPIC WIN.... CONGRATS... LUV ~LINDA Paul Callus May 30, 2014 at 12:23 PM Hi Linda...thanks for stopping by:) Read your latest poem a few days ago, but on revisiting it I realized that I had not even commented on it!! Must be old age setting in!! /x/ paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser May 29, 2014 at 2:18 PM Congratulations dearie Paul..:) tea for a treat!!! With muffin..:) I like your last line a two pictures of death..:)!!!!! Paul Callus May 29, 2014 at 3:21 PM Thank you Olive_eloi:) You read well into poetry! I'll make the tea...you make the muffins :)) cu // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma May 28, 2014 at 10:18 PM Enormous write Paul, power of emotions,, great ! perfect to the theme ,,, congrats on huge win ! Paul Callus May 29, 2014 at 1:02 PM Thank you Dr Upma; you never fail to comment favourably! I do appreciate it :) // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta May 28, 2014 at 9:56 PM Congratulations on the fine win in the contest, Paul Paul Callus May 29, 2014 at 3:18 PM Thank you Dr Ram; enjoyed your winning entry, too. // paul

Skat A May 28, 2014 at 7:12 PM PAUL, Congrats---- thank you for supporting my "Diamond Dust, Devil" contest. Love ~SKAT~ Paul Callus May 29, 2014 at 2:49 AM Many thanks Skat; I enjoy participating in your contests. Very pleased you placed me high on your winners' list :)) // paul

Cecilia Macfarlane May 6, 2014 at 7:55 PM Excellent write Paul, it leaves the reader wanting more. Hugs Paul Callus May 7, 2014 at 9:36 AM Thank you Cecilia, both for stopping by and for the lovely comments. cu /x/ paul

Shadow Hamilton May 2, 2014 at 7:37 AM I agree with Andrea a most powerful poem that transcends death and war brilliantly Paul fantastic pen hugs Paul Callus May 2, 2014 at 8:00 AM Many thanks Shadow! appreciate your lovely comments:) // paul

Andrea Dietrich May 2, 2014 at 12:12 AM wow, a very powerful story of death and dying. Could be a war story or could be a murder mystery. Anyway, I really like it. Paul Callus May 2, 2014 at 1:59 AM Hi Andrea! I'm still trying to work out how it all started...and how it's going to finish!! Not sure if I die...or live to fight another day. Could keep that up my sleeve, for a sequel:) txs for stopping by; have a nice day:) // paul

Carol Eastman May 1, 2014 at 4:46 PM The imagery and story are really great here. Paul Callus May 1, 2014 at 5:15 PM Many thanks Carol; your comment is much appreciated :) // paul

Keith O.J. Hunt May 1, 2014 at 9:15 AM Loved this ride Paul! Paul Callus May 1, 2014 at 9:52 AM Thank you Keith....it's now coming to the end!! // paul

Kristy Chun May 1, 2014 at 12:44 AM Awesome write paul! Paul Callus May 1, 2014 at 4:14 AM Thank you Kristy! So glad you like. cu around. // paul

Barbara Gorelick April 29, 2014 at 6:42 PM Whoa! love it. Well done Paul. BG Paul Callus April 30, 2014 at 7:59 AM Glad you enjoyed it Barbara! Thanks for the visit..and lovely comments :) // paul

Tim Smith April 29, 2014 at 5:09 PM The devil is one tough foe. I am glad you defeated him. Paul Callus April 30, 2014 at 7:58 AM Thanks Tim....but in reality he's quite a tough customer!! cu // paul

Nette Onclaud April 29, 2014 at 4:13 PM forceful and strong read, paul.. like how this flowed; intense!.. huggs Paul Callus April 29, 2014 at 4:37 PM Many thanks Nette; your feedback always gives me a good idea about the poem's worth. much appreciated. /x/ paul

Jan Allison April 29, 2014 at 2:45 PM ooh very deep and dark Paul but fabulous imagery - I actually feel chilled reading this so you have done a fab job! Hugs jan xxx Jan Allison April 29, 2014 at 2:56 PM :-) Jan xxx Paul Callus April 29, 2014 at 2:53 PM Thank you Jan....lovely comments that are like ointment on my bleeding wound:) you might be my savior:) // paul