Devil Water

to tell the truth i have to tell the tale of a dangerous drunk...drowning in devil water...soon to get sunk
menacing stares from demons all around...laughing as he stumbles and staggers in the 
lounge
another sip of devil water...slippin deeper into sin
he lights a cigarette and smokes his soul to death
from open until close he stays shackled and he's chained
i have to tell the truth...diminsihed he stays drained
devil water brings the pleasure and the pleasure turns to pain

riches turn to rags...beautiful babes and harlot honeys by morning turn to hags
dressed in bags dark disguises get discovered
sweat and tears in love stained sheets...he stays blind and undercover

hungover like a cliff now he's searching for a remedy...pop the top on deadly 
poison...swallow hard his slow disease
a slow breeze it turns into a whirlwind...twisting all of his thoughts,hopes,and dreams
i have to tell the truth as his spirit starts to scream

no way out as devil water starts to rise...sexy smiles turn into sharks and brothers turn into baracudas
mind of madness just like a riot...lawless and loveless grab like looters
spending all his cash on a healthy ass,and hellacious hooters
taking shots like shooters...another bullet in his brain
will this be the lucky night? will he go dark and deranged?

DUI's like invisible spies...red and blue lights up the night
he puts the pedal to the metal like an eagle fast in flight
one turns into two and two turns into four and as four turns into eight...now he curses being born
mile long skid marks where demons bark...100 miles per hour straight into a ditch...his 
corpse gets parked
way down in the darkest depths now he drinks the devils vomit
he gags and chokes and swears that he will never...
the devil he just laughs as he pulls another lever

anthony_beesley@yahoo.com

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 10/3/2010 6:24:00 PM
Alcohol is a killer, excellent write and very vivid description of such a deadly disease.
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Date: 9/30/2010 3:23:00 PM
Yes you can get a point across. A strong story that might be even stronger with a bit of traditional punctuation and capitalization and paragraph formation LOL, I know nag nag nag! Well you have such promise!!! SO great to see you in the winners circle! Light & Love
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Date: 9/27/2010 11:40:00 AM
Congratulations on your fourth place win, I enjoyed reading. Caryl
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Date: 9/26/2010 5:47:00 PM
Incredible story, Anthony. You have quite an imagination! Congratulations on your win. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/26/2010 4:38:00 PM
Congratulations on the fine win in the contest, anthony
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Date: 9/26/2010 4:22:00 PM
Really good tale about a sad character. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/26/2010 4:02:00 PM
Congrats Anthony on your big win in the Story Time contest .. a wonderful write and win to enjoy tonight with luv..
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Date: 9/26/2010 3:48:00 PM
Congratulations on your 4th Place win in my Story Time contest Anthony. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/19/2010 12:03:00 PM
Enjoyed stopping by to say hi while reading your poetry, have yourself a wonderful day full of love & joy. Keep them smiles coming*luv ~SKAT
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Date: 9/18/2010 1:41:00 PM
Soupy Mail
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Date: 9/18/2010 1:26:00 PM
interesting one, very cool, enjoyed this one Anthony..P.D.
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Date: 9/18/2010 5:20:00 AM
You've captured the wretchedness of what drunkeness can do. Excellent write!
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