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Detrimental Train Ride Poem

Drowning in distance
Homesick lips
Chapped and bewildered

Skin pale
Faded by friction
Squinty hands
Hold sunken eyes blinded

Voices echo
Under chewed fingernails
In throbbing vocal cords

ash ingested
leaves feet tapping
rhythms mindless in nature
corresponding
with denim treble
between legs withdrawing

sunrise water
fills my mind’s puzzles
deliberate and violently
melts into my sleep
so i can dream again

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 4/28/2010 6:42:00 PM
So many wonderful lines in this poem. The title got my attention. I am a locomotive engineer and just had to read this one! The last stanza was amazing!!!
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Date: 3/12/2010 9:10:00 AM
A great piece, Julian....I've asked Audrey to post this comment on my behalf...Jimmy
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