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a crow flies upwards

leaving its forlorn shadow

 stranded on the ground

birdhaiku

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Delice Arleen Skelly

September 13, 2015 at 1:41 PM

Your delightful haiku creates a wonderful image, complimented perfectly by the illustration. Nicely done~Delice

Paul Callus

September 13, 2015 at 4:53 PM

I am pleased you stopped by to read my humble haiku, Delice. Your lovely comments are appreciated. ~ Regards // paul

Kp Nunez

September 12, 2015 at 10:06 AM

splendid imagery!

Paul Callus

September 12, 2015 at 2:35 PM

Thank you Kim! Glad that you like:) hugs // paul

Skat A

September 11, 2015 at 8:28 AM

Good haiku. Separating them, a new journey I believe. Skat

Paul Callus

September 12, 2015 at 2:32 PM

Thank you Skat. A new journey it could well be! // paul

Kelly Deschler

September 10, 2015 at 2:17 PM

This is very inspiring! ...If only humans could fly upwards just as easily... A wonderful haiku, Paul :)

Paul Callus

September 10, 2015 at 2:27 PM

Thank you Kelly. Yes...it would be great to fly up to freedom, leaving life's problems behind:)

Laura Breidenthal

September 8, 2015 at 3:33 PM

Very interesting...I am really enjoying your haiku...your use of personification for this scene is very intriguing and leaves one to ponder...Always, Laura

Paul Callus

September 8, 2015 at 4:00 PM

I appreciate your lovely feedback, Laura. Thank you for stopping by. ~ Regards ~~ paul

Andrea Dietrich

September 7, 2015 at 12:30 PM

wow, what a thought!! I REALLY like this KU!!

Paul Callus

September 7, 2015 at 4:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea...and I like your reaction:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

September 6, 2015 at 1:03 AM

Your pen is just golden Paul.. witty! Blessed weekend~Olive Eloisa hugs!

Paul Callus

September 6, 2015 at 3:57 AM

Thank you Olive_eloi:) Yet, that shadow, faithfully, will be waiting patiently for its return! Hugs // paul

Kim Merryman

September 5, 2015 at 5:42 PM

I like this, Paul! The picture you posted with it goes well and makes the image more vivid! Love, Kim

Paul Callus

September 5, 2015 at 7:52 PM

Thank you for reading and commenting, Kim. Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Theresa Cw

September 5, 2015 at 2:37 PM

I so totally agree with what Anne-Lise has said. quite amazing with so little words. Very gifted pen Paul.... hugs Theresa

Paul Callus

September 5, 2015 at 4:08 PM

Thank you for the visit and lovely comments, Theresa! A pleasant weekend to you:) Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 5, 2015 at 11:22 AM

- Perfect in word and image, well done Paul :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

September 5, 2015 at 4:07 PM

Thank you Anne Lise:) Enjoy the rest of the weekend! Hugs // paul

Judy Konos

September 5, 2015 at 11:20 AM

Only you could come up with this gem!

Paul Callus

September 5, 2015 at 3:54 PM

Thank you Judy....you are kind...and you are a gem:) Regards ~ paul

Tim Smith

September 5, 2015 at 10:35 AM

An excellent haiku Paul. Have a lovely weekend...Tim

Paul Callus

September 5, 2015 at 3:39 PM

Glad it's to your liking, Tim:) Thank you....and enjoy your weekend, too. // paul

Jan Allison

September 5, 2015 at 9:38 AM

Very clever haiku Paul:-) hugs jan xx

Jan Allison

September 5, 2015 at 5:46 PM

had favourited it thanks Paul we will look into it before we visit:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

September 5, 2015 at 2:32 PM

Thank you Jan! (By the way.....check out: tallinja.com ... new format; quite helpful.) Hugs // paul

Eileen Manassian

September 5, 2015 at 9:36 AM

Well, you are a smart one, aren't you, dear? :) You write so beautifully, Paul. Lovely...

Paul Callus

September 5, 2015 at 2:43 PM

Thank you Eileen:) You are very generous! Incidentally I regard your work in similar fashion:) Hugs...enjoy the weekend! // paul

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