Notes About The Poem

 

Poetic Form: Sonnet/Enclosed Rhyme
Inspired: 2023 December 24

 

*2nd Place*
This or That, Vol 22
Contest Judged: 2024 January 10
Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh

 

Image: N/A

 

 

Desperate Hope

If there'd be a crawlspace big enough for
a mouse to fit through, it will be no worth
for measured do one pleasure of a dearth
will be a great loss to all concerned more

Findings of a soul well depth is of choice
to best contemplate the resolve pressing
the fleeting passage of time jams healing
trends insurmountable odds, less a voice

Quietude crunches, replace nervousness
and snaps a cranium continued grounds
tethering edges e'er relinquished sounds
of wakes are suitable bite less nerves us

Hope claims honorable desperate needs
results 'wish' that expectation succeeds.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Ibeh Avatar
January 11, 2024 at 10:39 AM
Amazing! You're one of the very best at writing sonnets, William:-) Congratulations on your win in my contest!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
January 11, 2024 at 10:54 AM
Thank you, Edward. You maintained your groundwork of interest with your contest that enthusiast become willing participants, my friend. Aloha, William
Alex Avatar
January 10, 2024 at 10:15 PM
"Hope claims honorable desperate needs results 'wish' that expectation succeeds" - Great sonnet with a grand ending. Congratulations!
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
January 11, 2024 at 10:34 AM
Thank you, Christuraj. Your thought filled expressions are greatly appreciated, my friend. Aloha, William
Pandit Avatar
December 25, 2023 at 6:30 AM
You invoked emotions splendidly, my friend--of hope still rooting through desperation.
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
December 25, 2023 at 6:54 AM
Mahalo, Vijay on this western celebrated day and as my mother traveled the world on her missionary days she notes added care to green minds of the masses to the Christian faith during this time she referred to as America's Celebrated Seasonal Day/leave-out Christmas & Holiday or Holy Day. I was a student of Sociology and told her of sensitivity approach. Seasons Best, my friend. Aloha, William
One Avatar
December 25, 2023 at 3:34 AM
This is a very creative sonnet Hilo.. you did it really well.. all the best.
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
December 25, 2023 at 5:13 AM
Ah, the first of the three was my choice where my two desperados' hope to win concocted within my drama, but alas, 'twas ill-fated. This one might make 3rd, eh?<--(wonder if this punctual mark is subjectively approving, are we still a democracy, or was a queen resurrected somewhere south of Sandwich?) Thanks for your optimism, Silent One. Aloha, William
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