Desire

dewdrops linger on delicate pedals
my tender kisses on your soft neck
crimson bud neath surface, glows
desire's flame burns deep inside



July 25, 2014
Contest: The Passion of the Jue Just
Sponsor: Nette Onclaud

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Monterey Sirak

August 9, 2014 at 6:59 AM

Fantastic! Kisses lingering like dewdrops, what an image.

Debbie Guzzi

July 29, 2014 at 12:24 PM

perfect use of euphemisms! Light & Love

Arlene Smith

July 29, 2014 at 2:33 PM

Your comments made my day, dear Debbie!.. Thanks and hugs.. Arlene

Andrea Dietrich

July 28, 2014 at 3:18 PM

nice and sexy!!! I think it will do well in the contest.

Arlene Smith

July 28, 2014 at 6:00 PM

Thanks, dear Andrea! Wasn't sure about the form, but I am very happy with nice and sexy!!... :-) .. Hugs.. Arlene

Gry Christensen

July 28, 2014 at 6:21 AM

Hi Arlene! Beautiful poem, very delicate and tender feeling to it. Like petals themselves. Also that drop of passion included. I hope you win! Fingers crossed

Arlene Smith

July 28, 2014 at 8:15 AM

Thank you so much for the generous comments, Gry, my dear friend.. Hugs.. Arlene

Paul Callus

July 26, 2014 at 8:08 AM

Hi Arlene! I don't know about the form (still have to check on it) but as far as poetry goes this reads like a winner to me. // paul .... ps typo (pe(t)als)

Arlene Smith

July 26, 2014 at 8:57 AM

Thank you, Paul, my dear friend. I tried to understand the form.. We shall see... Hugs.. Arlene

Earl Schumacker

July 25, 2014 at 6:03 PM

Hi Arlene, I think you did a great job here delving and diving into the unknown Jue Ju jungle. I think the main thing about this style is to create mood and emotion. I think you captured both quite nicely. Good luck in the contest. I think you have a winner. Take care. Earl

Arlene Smith

July 25, 2014 at 6:45 PM

Thank you so much, dear Earl.. All I had to go on was the rules of the contest and the picture.. Thanks for taking time to read mine..I read a few others and mabey I don't totally comprehend the form.. Hugs, my friend.. Arlene