Desire

dewdrops linger on delicate pedals my tender kisses on your soft neck crimson bud neath surface, glows desire's flame burns deep inside July 25, 2014 Contest: The Passion of the Jue Just Sponsor: Nette Onclaud

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Monterey Sirak

Date: 8/9/2014 6:59:00 AM

Fantastic! Kisses lingering like dewdrops, what an image.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/29/2014 12:24:00 PM

perfect use of euphemisms! Light & Love

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/29/2014 2:33:00 PM

Your comments made my day, dear Debbie!.. Thanks and hugs.. Arlene

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/28/2014 3:18:00 PM

nice and sexy!!! I think it will do well in the contest.

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/28/2014 6:00:00 PM

Thanks, dear Andrea! Wasn't sure about the form, but I am very happy with nice and sexy!!... :-) .. Hugs.. Arlene

Gry Christensen

Date: 7/28/2014 6:21:00 AM

Hi Arlene! Beautiful poem, very delicate and tender feeling to it. Like petals themselves. Also that drop of passion included. I hope you win! Fingers crossed

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/28/2014 8:15:00 AM

Thank you so much for the generous comments, Gry, my dear friend.. Hugs.. Arlene

Paul Callus

Date: 7/26/2014 8:08:00 AM

Hi Arlene! I don't know about the form (still have to check on it) but as far as poetry goes this reads like a winner to me. // paul .... ps typo (pe(t)als)

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/26/2014 8:57:00 AM

Thank you, Paul, my dear friend. I tried to understand the form.. We shall see... Hugs.. Arlene

Earl Schumacker

Date: 7/25/2014 6:03:00 PM

Hi Arlene, I think you did a great job here delving and diving into the unknown Jue Ju jungle. I think the main thing about this style is to create mood and emotion. I think you captured both quite nicely. Good luck in the contest. I think you have a winner. Take care. Earl

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/25/2014 6:45:00 PM

Thank you so much, dear Earl.. All I had to go on was the rules of the contest and the picture.. Thanks for taking time to read mine..I read a few others and mabey I don't totally comprehend the form.. Hugs, my friend.. Arlene

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/25/2014 8:51:00 AM

Wow Arlene that's an amazing Jue jo! Luck in contest dear!

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/25/2014 9:09:00 AM

Thanks, dear Upma!.. Newbie Mo-Jo on confusing Jue-Ju... Lol...hugs.. Arlene

Jan Allison

Date: 7/25/2014 5:55:00 AM

Good luck in the contest this really fits the bill with the picture:-) Hugs jan xxx

Arlene Smith
Date: 7/25/2014 6:07:00 AM

Thank you, sweet Jan.. Hugs.. Arlene