Desire

Fulfilling desire can toll

A sense of relief for the soul;

But death will begin

With the meaning of sin:

Desire that’s out of control.

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Rhonda Hero Aka Hero-Wilson

Date: 7/2/2010 9:44:00 PM

Such few words can say so much. I write things like this too. good write Congratulations on being featured. Rhonda Hero

Joshua Michael Dolezal

Date: 6/29/2010 10:16:00 PM

This is really well written! I think it would be absolutely incredible if desire wasn't repeated. Like, maybe "Longing," instead? Either way, the writer's opinion is most important, and you've done a great job on it. Good luck!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/29/2010 11:01:00 AM

Congratulations on your terrific poetry being featured this week Brenden. Love, Carol

Sarah Hales

Date: 6/29/2010 5:44:00 AM

Oh so true well done you !!! Sarah x

Adeleke Adeite

Date: 6/28/2010 10:56:00 AM

Hey, this is a wonderful piece; enjoy the honor of having your poem being featured this week. Please, keep your pen alive and keep up the great work!. You are great! Love, ~Adeleke.

Janette Fisher

Date: 6/28/2010 10:46:00 AM

Many congrats on your feature this week. Rgds Janette

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/25/2010 8:41:00 PM

Perfect limerick meter and great message. Congratulations. Andrea

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/25/2010 11:24:00 AM

Congratulations Brenden on your win in John Freeman's contest "Human Foible vs Godly Nature". Love, Carol

Ralph Taylor

Date: 6/25/2010 5:39:00 AM

Congrats, Brenden. Great write. You and yours have a great weekend. Rgds, Ralph

John Freeman

Date: 6/24/2010 11:11:00 PM

Yes, that human desire, has brought destruction upon many happy lives,Brenden. A fine presentation with your worthy poem. Thanks for your support, and congratulatios with this fine poem. Agape, Moses