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12.36pm Dec. 1, 2024         

 

 

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This poem was not entered in the contest. It came late. I scribbled this when I saw the last remaining slot. But it's fine for me. I am thanking the contest that inspired me to write this.

It’s been a while when I felt frozen on the ground Hotchpotches of skills around, I touched them one by one With overwhelming joy, l took them in one luggage I hauled and under a stagnant lake, my inertia has engaged. When a spark of discernment meddled right on time I focused on one…so light, I float and I climb I gained, grew and flourished smoothly in each priority I ascent, pulling others li'l by li'l on a way across…flying freely.

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Date: 12/1/2024 11:10:00 AM
Love what you did here.. In terms of structure, the poem’s progression mirrors the journey from stagnation to action, with the shift in tone from heaviness and inertia to lightness and growth. The metaphors of luggage, floating, climbing, and flying effectively capture the internal struggle and eventual release from confusion, emphasizing the transformative power of focus and discernment in the face of life's complexities.
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Date: 12/1/2024 6:35:00 AM
- A skillful poem, Len ... I give you a top first place in the contest you missed :) - hugs
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