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Derelict Beauty

rooster’s gaze fixed east
                         moss upon its left hip…
                           distant windchimes 

                               15 Mar 2015

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Andrea Dietrich

April 30, 2015 at 10:48 PM

DAvid, I seem to be going in circles looking for a poem of yours I have not seen already. anyway, still do enjoy this one!

Poet Destroyer A

March 18, 2015 at 11:44 PM

Awesome win David...PD

Skat A

March 18, 2015 at 11:06 PM

DAVID, CONGRATULATIONS, on your 3-line win :) ~SKAT~

Andrea Dietrich

March 18, 2015 at 1:58 PM

nicely done, David! Congrats for your win.

Paul Callus

March 18, 2015 at 11:26 AM

A neglected old weathercock! Beautiful haiku, David! Congrats on your fine win. // paul

Debbie Guzzi

March 17, 2015 at 8:22 PM

Yup you reached haiku-ville ;) [You could leave off the clang-the word windchime makes us hear the clang!] Congratulations on your win. Light & Love

Barbara Gorelick

March 17, 2015 at 6:12 PM

You got it right! Congrats on your win. These are so hard to do..BG

Jan Allison

March 17, 2015 at 6:04 PM

Brilliantly penned David many congrats on your win:-) Hugs jan xx

Debbie Guzzi

March 15, 2015 at 8:31 PM

Dave you have to be very careful- what you have done here VERY WELL is SHOW us an old weather vane in the first 2 lines - now don't TELL us it is a weather vane in line 3 - line 3 is supposed to be something unexpected that surprised you- what else could have been heard? tasted, smelled, felt in the same moment you saw the beauty of the weather vein - you have time think. Light & Love

David Mohn

March 15, 2015 at 8:42 PM

Thanks for the insite Debbie...I'll see what I can do