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Dented Cans

DENTED CANS At first pristine in form and colour bright They glittered in the clear warm air of youth With dreams and goals attainable in our sight Then framed in words unstrained by filtered truth To have, to do, to be, without a question With faith that what’s imagined may gain life Those holy grails of dreams beyond suggestion Before opposing forces entered strife Then caution tempered will and brought delay And we withdrew the life we had bestowed On plans we’d made, they took on aspect grey Were lost from view as cans kicked down the road Could we unseal those dented vessels’ seams And then revive their long forgotten dreams 9 January 2018

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 4/19/2018 10:45:00 PM
I love the spin you took for this challenge, Geoffrey. Congrats.
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Geoffrey Brewer
Date: 4/19/2018 11:00:00 PM
Thank you for your feed-back, Line.
Date: 1/14/2018 12:51:00 PM
Wonderful sonnet! Congrats on your win :) xomo
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Geoffrey Brewer
Date: 1/18/2018 10:27:00 AM
Thank you Maureen
Date: 1/13/2018 4:48:00 PM
Many congrats on your win Geoffrey:-) hugs Jan xx
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Geoffrey Brewer
Date: 1/14/2018 4:29:00 PM
Thank you for the kind words, Jan
Date: 1/13/2018 12:32:00 PM
...those Holy Grails of dreams----Very nicely done Geoffrey. A sonnet in a dented can....thanks for entering the contest
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Geoffrey Brewer
Date: 1/14/2018 4:28:00 PM
Many thanks, John

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