Rhoda Tripp Poet Rispetto

Dented Cans

Lifelong series, proliferation of dreams
Procrastination pushes cans to rear shelf
Crushed pineapple replaces peaches and creams
Depleted pantry unenvisioned of self

Back burners overwrought iron pans of sin
Awaiting an opener, woman of tin
Lifelong series, ambitions, intended plans
Plentiful in could haves, instead, dented cans


Written:  1/1/2018
Contest:  Dented Cans
Hosted by:  John lawless

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Darlene De Beaulieu January 31, 2018 at 2:48 PM Hello Rohda, i so agree with this poem. Have a nice day my friend.

Edward Mccall January 4, 2018 at 12:11 PM I get the meaning of this poem; an uninhibited look at ones self. Great write good luck in the contest. Rhoda Tripp January 4, 2018 at 3:46 PM Yep, Dearheart. It most certainly is. Great minds...and thank you.

Eve Roper January 2, 2018 at 8:04 PM I love the verse, Rhoda, not to sure of what to write in this idea, but I gave it a try.. luck in the contest. Hugs eve Rhoda Tripp January 3, 2018 at 9:03 AM Thank you, Eve. Much appreciated.

Pat Adams January 2, 2018 at 12:20 PM I agree on several comments below. Amazing to make sense with what seems to be a very challenging form. (That I never heard of either) 11 syllables on every line and it rhymes and makes sense! A big WOW form me and a FAV as well. I really want to try this form! You are a poet and a muse!!.....pat Rhoda Tripp January 2, 2018 at 12:44 PM Wow. Thank you, Pat. Yes. Give the form a ride around the block, throw the bike down a few times, then hop back on. It's challenging, but fun.

CayCay Godwin January 2, 2018 at 10:33 AM And a wow for you! I have no clue what to do with this theme, but you and your muse pulled off a riveting write, so deep in so few lines. Impressive, Rhoda - truly. I've never heard of this form, not that I remember, but you have inspired me to check it out. Again, riveting - each stanza worth a study. All the best ... CayCay Rhoda Tripp January 2, 2018 at 12:41 PM Thank you very much, CayCay. I looked at the contest a week ago and thought "Nope. Can't pull it off" and then I gave the word "can" a different meaning beyond tin, and just tried to pull it together. Give the form a whirl. Kind of fun.

John Gondolf January 1, 2018 at 8:25 PM Nicely written, Rhoda, I like your ambition in tackling new forms. Best of luck in the contest. Procrastination is a bad habit of mine as well. Rhoda Tripp January 1, 2018 at 9:25 PM Thank you, John. My ultimate goal is to try them all, but that will take years as I still haven't figured out iambic pentameter, Lol. I do so appreciate your constant support and kind comments. You are a gem.

Paul Callus January 1, 2018 at 5:06 PM You have been reaching out of the box, Rhoda...very creative; I love this metaphorical write. I hope to see this on the winners' list. ~ Hope the new year gave you a big smile as you welcomed her in:) Regards // paul Rhoda Tripp January 1, 2018 at 5:24 PM I so appreciate you being here on the Soup as a mentor and friend. Your encouragement from day one has helped me to grow. I've always felt, Paul, that in order to stand out, we must think differently than our counterparts and rip up the box. Have you sensed I'm a nonconformist? Lol. I hope your new year is the best ever.

John Fleming January 1, 2018 at 3:13 PM I say, Rhoda...this really is rather good. If I was the judge of the contest I would be ear-marking this little dazzler right now as a possible winner - excellent piece of rhyming poetry! All the best for your New Year - cheers!! :) john Rhoda Tripp January 1, 2018 at 3:45 PM Wow! John...this glowing review coming from a man of your talent is certainly humbling and very much appreciated. I'm doing a happy dance. Thank you so much. It means more to me than you know.