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Dented Cans

Lifelong series, proliferation of dreams Procrastination pushes cans to rear shelf Crushed pineapple replaces peaches and creams Depleted pantry unenvisioned of self Back burners overwrought iron pans of sin Awaiting an opener, woman of tin Lifelong series, ambitions, intended plans Plentiful in could haves, instead, dented cans Written: 1/1/2018 Contest: Dented Cans Hosted by: John lawless

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Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/31/2018 2:48:00 PM

Hello Rohda, i so agree with this poem. Have a nice day my friend.

Edward Mccall

Date: 1/4/2018 12:11:00 PM

I get the meaning of this poem; an uninhibited look at ones self. Great write good luck in the contest.

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/4/2018 3:46:00 PM

Yep, Dearheart. It most certainly is. Great minds...and thank you.

Eve Roper

Date: 1/2/2018 8:04:00 PM

I love the verse, Rhoda, not to sure of what to write in this idea, but I gave it a try.. luck in the contest. Hugs eve

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/3/2018 9:03:00 AM

Thank you, Eve. Much appreciated.

Pat Adams

Date: 1/2/2018 12:20:00 PM

I agree on several comments below. Amazing to make sense with what seems to be a very challenging form. (That I never heard of either) 11 syllables on every line and it rhymes and makes sense! A big WOW form me and a FAV as well. I really want to try this form! You are a poet and a muse!!.....pat

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/2/2018 12:44:00 PM

Wow. Thank you, Pat. Yes. Give the form a ride around the block, throw the bike down a few times, then hop back on. It's challenging, but fun.

CayCay Jennings

Date: 1/2/2018 10:33:00 AM

And a wow for you! I have no clue what to do with this theme, but you and your muse pulled off a riveting write, so deep in so few lines. Impressive, Rhoda - truly. I've never heard of this form, not that I remember, but you have inspired me to check it out. Again, riveting - each stanza worth a study. All the best ... CayCay

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/2/2018 12:41:00 PM

Thank you very much, CayCay. I looked at the contest a week ago and thought "Nope. Can't pull it off" and then I gave the word "can" a different meaning beyond tin, and just tried to pull it together. Give the form a whirl. Kind of fun.

John Gondolf

Date: 1/1/2018 8:25:00 PM

Nicely written, Rhoda, I like your ambition in tackling new forms. Best of luck in the contest. Procrastination is a bad habit of mine as well.

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/1/2018 9:25:00 PM

Thank you, John. My ultimate goal is to try them all, but that will take years as I still haven't figured out iambic pentameter, Lol. I do so appreciate your constant support and kind comments. You are a gem.

Paul Callus

Date: 1/1/2018 5:06:00 PM

You have been reaching out of the box, Rhoda...very creative; I love this metaphorical write. I hope to see this on the winners' list. ~ Hope the new year gave you a big smile as you welcomed her in:) Regards // paul

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/1/2018 5:24:00 PM

I so appreciate you being here on the Soup as a mentor and friend. Your encouragement from day one has helped me to grow. I've always felt, Paul, that in order to stand out, we must think differently than our counterparts and rip up the box. Have you sensed I'm a nonconformist? Lol. I hope your new year is the best ever.

John Fleming

Date: 1/1/2018 3:13:00 PM

I say, Rhoda...this really is rather good. If I was the judge of the contest I would be ear-marking this little dazzler right now as a possible winner - excellent piece of rhyming poetry! All the best for your New Year - cheers!! :) john

Rhoda Tripp
Date: 1/1/2018 3:45:00 PM

Wow! John...this glowing review coming from a man of your talent is certainly humbling and very much appreciated. I'm doing a happy dance. Thank you so much. It means more to me than you know.