Demon Whispers

Brains excreting pictures dreams stories "Chia Pet Poets" exploring emotional trade winds escaping reality for SIX minutes returning for seconds entranced for SIX hours thunder from fingers for days therapy for nights grins hidden deep beneath booger eyelids crusted wipe clean morning's green sleep disappearing dried dreams wetting the head in bed freeing sick insecurities exiled for years horror flicks on repeat since haunted childhood frozen within vaults SIX feet thick sledgehammer wrecking ball rehabilitation cannot promise demolition for good... diffusing demon whispers

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Nick Bagnall

Date: 11/16/2011 5:41:00 AM

I missed the three sixes until I read the comments - nice. Certainly got everyone talking with this piece, you captured a nightmarish feeling very well. The writing style & layout pulled me through the poem, made me rush, I don't think that is a bad thing in this piece, but it would have been much easier to read with some line breaks in there somewhere. Really enjoyed.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/12/2011 12:47:00 PM

this one kind of eluded me but the images are horrifying and I liked what one person commented below how you used three sixes!Very symbolic. At the very first I thought you were describing someone like me, addicted to poetrysoup. haha. a chia pet poet sounds rather sweet! I had a devil of a night. I'll tell ya later if you are interested. But life goes on. Catch ya later! Andrea

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/10/2011 1:59:00 PM

you've got punch..pizzazzz...you'd benifit from a regroup of lines [ a different page layout] If you want to learn forms I'm glad to help [I was decades where you are in form aversion lol] start with a couplet..my next contest will be couplet form..i'll walk you though it..it's a good bui;ding block..light & love

Joe Maverick

Date: 11/8/2011 11:56:00 PM

The battle goes on...i see! interesting write here.!

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 11/7/2011 7:44:00 PM

Three sixes, eh? Chilling. I love this! Always, Laura

John Aaron Green

Date: 11/7/2011 7:59:00 AM

love this poem,,,for i am a humble man myself with enemys on all sides,,,and this is a wonderful outlet to battle those demons with words of life and power,,,super write my friend,,,gives me great ideas as to another write,,,thanks for your time spent on reading and commenting on my poems.......

Lisa Cooper

Date: 11/7/2011 7:36:00 AM

interesting pen, sounds like my nightmare after a chilifest.....lol it is nice to read the same genre as my own. dark. :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/6/2011 9:43:00 AM

An extraordinary nightmare, Joey. Really love the reference to "Chia Pet Poets." Frightening images very accurately portrayed! I've had nightmares since childhood too. Love, Carolyn

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/6/2011 4:39:00 AM

a very experiential piece,JS... great interplay of word usage.. much enjoyed! ;) huggs!