Delirium -Second Attempt To Post

shambolic
          delirium
            these thoughts
               building within
                  as the world crumbles
                      around me
                         like trees
                             unstable
                                 from storms
                                     emotions
                                         building up
                                             before erupting
                                                 through the hush of silence
                                                               cries
                                                          muffled in anguish


June 5th 2020
 
Pick-A-Title, Vol 18 - Yalto 2 - Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh 
2. Delirium
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Hamilton Avatar
June 8, 2020 at 6:26 PM
I love the layout of this one, looks like I was right, congrats on another top win!
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 8, 2020 at 5:57 PM
A fantastic First Yalto Sandra! Congratulations on your deserving First Place win! xxoo
Kauffman Avatar
June 8, 2020 at 1:10 PM
Your imagery is, as always, vivid - "like trees unstable from storms, great picture in your whirling Yalto. Congratulations on your first place, my friend. Hugs and prayers.
Watt Avatar
June 8, 2020 at 12:33 PM
Glad to see you overcame the technical difficulties of posting this. Love the downward descent, and the word "cries" slightly displace for emphasis. Another sad beauty, my friend. Congrats and hugs ~ John
Mishra Avatar
June 8, 2020 at 7:21 AM
This is both beautiful and heartfelt Sandra. So glad I got to read it. Congratulations on your win :)
Agustin Avatar
June 8, 2020 at 4:59 AM
Congrats! Your "muffled in anguish" is intense. God bless you.
Allison Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 3:19 PM
so glad you were able to re post this and get a very well deserved first place, have had the same issue had to re post my hugs poem and I couldn't edit it. congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 2:51 PM
I love how it kept going off to the right, and right down to that final cries "muffled in anguish" Congrats on a great win, Sandy
Andresen Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 1:53 PM
- With strong wind you won a first place ... congratulations so much, Sandra :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Adams Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 2:21 PM
Thank you so much Anne-Lise...I don't know why the original kept appearing and disappearing on me :) hugs
Wolf Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 1:08 PM
Many congratulations to you on your first-place win, Sandra! Smiles, Gershon
Adams Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 2:20 PM
Thank you so much Gershon!... hugs
Ibeh Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 6:27 AM
Nice to see this gem reappear again, Sandra:-) I was wondering where it went! Congratulations on your first place win!
Adams Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 2:20 PM
Thank you so much Edward... that was my first attempt at a yalto so I was so pleased to see the top win... I don't know what happened with the original it kept appearing and disappearing on me... some could see it, some could not, and if I would edit I could see it one minute and then not the next so figured it was easier to redo the poem... thank you for your kind words, for hosting the contest and for the win :) hugs
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 1:29 AM
I think he gave us some great titles to work with Sandra. I see you were inspired by this one. I had never written a Yalto before. I think you did a wonderful job on your entry. Blessings xxoo
Adams Avatar
June 7, 2020 at 2:17 PM
they were awesome titled to work with and syzygy I wanted to write for because I remember getting that word in a spelling bee in 6th grade...I got it correct but the word always stuck with me... but delirium seemed to come out with my muse... my first ever yalto as well :) hugs my friend! XoXo
Pandit Avatar
June 6, 2020 at 6:29 AM
Anguish flows in every word---I feel the eruption. Glad to see you back, Sandy.
Adams Avatar
June 6, 2020 at 9:27 PM
Thank you so much Vijay... the muse has been fickle and on top of the virus and protests, we had days of violent storms that downed trees and wires and left us in the dark 3 days, some people are still in the dark and there was so much damage they have so many wires to replace they called in troops from other states to help... hugs
One Avatar
June 6, 2020 at 6:08 AM
You captured the emotions of delirium well..
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