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vulnerable shoulders scantily clad bare of protecting pauldron without his strong arms encompassing chest underdressed short of a shield without his beating breastplate pressing helmet unharnessed mind recklessly unleased without comforting thoughts of our melding beaming brass unattached sword unwielded for defense strong arms to swing ~ missing Sponsor: Edward Ibeh Chosen title: Defenseless 3/2/2020

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Date: 5/6/2020 2:39:00 AM
Beautiful ...
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Date: 3/7/2020 10:44:00 AM
Hi Juliet, I really like the wordplay in your poem, the last line especially effective - I predict this will do well in the contest!
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Date: 3/3/2020 7:33:00 AM
Seems pretty defenseless.
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Juliet Ligon
Date: 3/3/2020 2:24:00 PM
Thanks, Victor.
Date: 3/3/2020 6:52:00 AM
Wonderful, Juliet! I had to look up pauldrons - the meaning fuller! Yes, we must wear the armor of God! Nicely done!
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Juliet Ligon
Date: 3/3/2020 2:23:00 PM
Thanks for your comments, Kim. I'd originally written this about a woman without her man being more vulnerable to predators, but I also see a likeness of the armor of God and I think I like that better. I might do a version two to include the belt and sandles and leave out the pauldron, that way it will better signify the armor of God.