Defeated

Love has brought me streams of sorrows It has kissed my heart with tears and pain Life seems plagued with darker tomorrows When everything of life and love is vain. The distant skies comes crashing down The dark numbing silence invades me As sad the hues, from sacred hills crown My head with a forlorn memory. I toiled to draw comfort by the stream That my days somehow may turn to peace But hope does trap my thoughts in a dream That maybe your love had never ceased. I dread the days when smiles had vanished When loneliness sung, its songs of despair Your ways are cruel, my soul is thus tarnished For loving you so much, my darling so dear. Tender I lay in fields of hopelessness And trained my tearful sorrows to obey Though blindly I crawl in love's emptiness In this gloom, I see the light of day.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


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Date: 2/3/2014 1:44:00 PM
Another phenomenal poem, Mustapha. Absolutely love it. Totally identified. Great, great piece, my friend. Kudos!
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Date: 1/20/2014 8:53:00 PM
Reminds' me of my sweet old days' with a love gone bad! Let me stop making this all about me! (:0)'s Nice but tragic...Love the last minute rhyme at the end... your friend in the pen/G.FIELDS
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Date: 1/3/2014 3:22:00 PM
I can truly relate to the sorrow and the despair that sometimes comes with love. You expressed your emotions so brilliantly here. I could feel your pain coming through in every line. A very deep and heartfelt write. Amazing work, Mustapha!
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Date: 12/31/2013 3:15:00 PM
Long time no see, what a fantastic poem! a 7 for sure!
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Mustapha Mohammed
Date: 1/1/2014 10:32:00 AM
Yeah its been awhile. Hopefully for this new year I will be around more often to write and read more poetry.
Date: 12/29/2013 2:48:00 PM
Over......draws closer......memory retreats.....love listens! Great writing Mustapha! Happy New Year,,,chuck
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Mustapha Mohammed
Date: 1/1/2014 10:33:00 AM
Happy new year wishes to you also Chuck. Thanks for your lovely comment on my poem.
Date: 12/29/2013 12:41:00 PM
well dearest friend deep dark beautifully penned heartfelt i totally relate the frog has made an appearance something to make you smile happy new year to i pray your wishes come true
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Mustapha Mohammed
Date: 1/1/2014 10:34:00 AM
Yes the frog has made an appearance..lol. Thanks again old pal and happy new year once more to you.
Date: 12/29/2013 5:36:00 AM
Very expressive and emotive work..I can feel the pain of defeat..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Mustapha Mohammed
Date: 1/1/2014 10:35:00 AM
Thank you Sara for your kind comment on my poem. Hope you are keeping well.
Date: 12/28/2013 3:36:00 PM
In your defeat you must find an inner streigth to move forward and find someone when your ready to try again with. but you've written with a great emotion here nice job and remember your not alone here on the soup. cheri
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Mustapha Mohammed
Date: 1/1/2014 10:36:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comment KK.
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Mustapha Mohammed
Date: 1/1/2014 10:35:00 AM
Thank you Cheri for your encouraging words. It has truly made my day.
Date: 12/28/2013 3:01:00 PM
Fragrant!
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Mustapha Mohammed
Date: 1/1/2014 10:37:00 AM
Thank you KK for your kind comment.
Date: 12/27/2013 10:14:00 PM
Oh Mustapha... a beautiful poem from your soul..another can bring joy but happiness comes from within..knowing God's love...the peace will come when that right someone deserves your loving heart...the pain is easy to feel in your words...but believing in the light of another day too..stay strong my friend..lean on those who care..
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Date: 12/27/2013 3:13:00 PM
Mustapha, I hope you are doing well:) I am glad the sad feelings are leaving your soul. It is nice to see the light of another day. Thank you once again for always being you. A deep poem, uplifting ending... Hope you had a wonderful Christmas with family. -always~ Linda
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Date: 12/27/2013 2:32:00 PM
So happy to see a poem from you here..A very emotive and beautiful poem indeed.Happy holidays : )
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Mustapha Mohammed
Date: 12/27/2013 3:04:00 PM
Happy holidays to you also beloved poet. I've decided to return to PS. : ) Thank you my friend.
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