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Deciduous

Late autumn winds are quickening the leaves igniting metamorphosis of fall where spectral colors burst forth and enthrall a rapture brief, then vanishes and flees. With fading eyes, she stares through window's eaves to view the ancient oak, its heartbeat call she feels the length of years, a weighty pall her fleeting life, like leaves, will someday cease. A bitter cold now grips the ancient oak where destiny does hasten nature’s blows as dying leaves fall swiftly like a wave. She wakens suddenly at midnight’s stroke the scythe of death arrives, as her heart knows she’ll join the leaves that settle on her grave.

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Date: 9/23/2024 10:52:00 AM
Laura, wonderful use of metaphoric autumn and the oak tree. Your lines are filled with grieving and the sense of loss that underpins all of autumn's beauty. Well done. Beautifully written. Blessings!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/23/2024 5:53:00 PM
Thanks so much, Sam! Your kind comments mean a lot to me! :)
Date: 9/23/2024 5:18:00 AM
so beautiful and enchanting poem, the last verse is totally automnal, thanks poet
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/23/2024 5:52:00 PM
Thank you, Yann. I’m glad you enjoyed this! :)
Date: 9/16/2024 9:46:00 PM
Beautiful poem. I like the parallel's between the ancient oak and the person looking through the window. It's too strong and beautiful things must die, when the season comes.
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/17/2024 3:26:00 PM
Thank you for commenting on my poem, David. I’m glad you liked it! :)
Date: 9/15/2024 9:51:00 AM
Dear Laura, this is an exceptional write in both form/meter & message and...would have been among the top winners!
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/15/2024 8:07:00 PM
Thank you, Craig! I’m so happy you liked this! It was a challenge for me as I haven’t written in this structured form for a long time. Your comments made my day! ;)
Date: 9/14/2024 5:46:00 AM
A morbid take on the change of seasons, but realistic nonetheless. We're all headed for the dirt. The resurrection is a game changer, thankfully. Have a great weekend Laura
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/14/2024 6:36:00 AM
Yes, I knew I was thinking of death as I wrote this one. I’m still thinking a lot about death with my sister’s recent passing. Thanks for stopping by to comment, Tom. ;)
Date: 9/13/2024 10:14:00 PM
Dear Laura, the beauty and texture of each rhythmic verse captures the demise of both the autumn season and a “fleeting life” with poignant yet vivid imagery. Such a moving and splendid piece. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
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Laura Leiser
Date: 9/14/2024 6:33:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Susan. I was too late to get this in Craig’s contest, but I noticed you wrote a beauty! Take care! :)

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