Deciduous

Late autumn winds are quickening the leaves
igniting metamorphosis of fall
where spectral colors burst forth and enthrall
a rapture brief, then vanishes and flees.

With fading eyes, she stares through window's eaves
to view an ancient oak, its heartbeat call
she feels the length of years, a weighty pall
her fleeting life, like leaves, will someday cease. 

A bitter cold now grips the ancient oak
as dying leaves fall swiftly like a wave
her years are passed, no more to save 
grim destiny does hasten nature’s blows. 

She wakens suddenly at midnight’s stroke
the scythe of death arrives, as she well knows
she’ll join the leaves that settle on her grave.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Kauffman Avatar
September 23, 2024 at 10:52 AM
Laura, wonderful use of metaphoric autumn and the oak tree. Your lines are filled with grieving and the sense of loss that underpins all of autumn's beauty. Well done. Beautifully written. Blessings!
Leiser Avatar
September 23, 2024 at 5:53 PM
Thanks so much, Sam! Your kind comments mean a lot to me! :)
Rolland Avatar
September 23, 2024 at 5:18 AM
so beautiful and enchanting poem, the last verse is totally automnal, thanks poet
Leiser Avatar
September 23, 2024 at 5:52 PM
Thank you, Yann. I’m glad you enjoyed this! :)
Crandall Avatar
September 16, 2024 at 9:46 PM
Beautiful poem. I like the parallel's between the ancient oak and the person looking through the window. It's too strong and beautiful things must die, when the season comes.
Leiser Avatar
September 17, 2024 at 3:26 PM
Thank you for commenting on my poem, David. I’m glad you liked it! :)
Cornish Avatar
September 15, 2024 at 9:51 AM
Dear Laura, this is an exceptional write in both form/meter & message and...would have been among the top winners!
Leiser Avatar
September 15, 2024 at 8:07 PM
Thank you, Craig! I’m so happy you liked this! It was a challenge for me as I haven’t written in this structured form for a long time. Your comments made my day! ;)
Ashley Avatar
September 13, 2024 at 10:14 PM
Dear Laura, the beauty and texture of each rhythmic verse captures the demise of both the autumn season and a “fleeting life” with poignant yet vivid imagery. Such a moving and splendid piece. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Leiser Avatar
September 14, 2024 at 6:33 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Susan. I was too late to get this in Craig’s contest, but I noticed you wrote a beauty! Take care! :)
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