Deceit

I may be red, 
But she is dead.

Then he just left her there beside me,
Down by the roots of the big oak tree.

I have really sharp black thorns that hurt,
While she's decked in a torn blouse and skirt.

While he left with the heart that he broke,
She had words that she never spoke.

While she lies dead in the old bayou,
The words that she'd say were: I Love You.

Now that this sad story has come to an end,
I hope your heart isn't broken by your best friend.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 9/13/2009 8:53:00 AM
Great couplet form. Congratulations on your featured write. ~Milt~
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Date: 9/11/2009 9:25:00 PM
Awesome clever write ... congrates on being featured this week ..kind regards Jayne x x
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Date: 9/11/2009 4:56:00 PM
Congrats on your amazing feature write this week! Take care Love LIght Truth Patricia
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Date: 9/11/2009 5:52:00 AM
This is a wonderful, awesome… poem,.; I love your style. You are such a great poet. Please keep writing and congrats on your poem being featured this week. Hope to read more of your wonderful poems. You are great friend! Adeleke
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Date: 9/9/2009 6:10:00 AM
Thanks for sharing your wonderful poetry with us. Congrats on your feature write! Take care Love Light Truth Patricia
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Date: 9/9/2009 6:07:00 AM
Congratulations on your featured poem! Laura
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Date: 9/8/2009 7:08:00 PM
Savannah - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week – God Bless, mj
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Date: 9/8/2009 2:30:00 PM
Savannah, congrats on being featured this week...Raul
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Congratulations on your wonderful poetry being featured this week Savannah *xx*>>James
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Congratulations on your excellent poetry being featured this week Savannah. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/11/2009 7:27:00 AM
nice write. loved it!!!
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Date: 2/13/2009 4:40:00 PM
Dark but nice work Savannah...Raul
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