Paul Callus Poet Senryu

Notes About The Poem

© Lake Superior Magazine

Death On Lake Superior

tongue tied

the bell on the sunken ship

relives the trauma

- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - 
 
Contest: Sing Me a Senryu
Sponsor: Maureen McGreavy 
Inspired by the song:
“The Wreck of the Edmund Fitzgerald" by Gordon Lightfoot
               https://youtu.be/9vST6hVRj2A?t=3
Placed 2nd

♡Like0

Share Poem

---

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

1 2

Angela Crabtree November 27, 2020 at 5:03 PM Great song, great poem :) Paul Callus November 28, 2020 at 5:42 AM Thank you, Angela :) Regards // paul

James Inman October 5, 2019 at 9:19 AM Great song and write Paul. A fascinating tragedy, I love the bell touch. Paul Callus October 5, 2019 at 5:17 PM Thank you, James. Enjoyed your winning entry, too. Regards // paul

Tom Cunningham October 4, 2019 at 12:17 PM Back with congrats Paul, I knew this would do well. Tom Paul Callus October 5, 2019 at 5:29 PM A double thank you for a double visit, my friend :) Regards // paul

Constance La France October 3, 2019 at 5:09 PM Paul congratulations on your win!

Line Gauthier October 3, 2019 at 4:21 PM Congrats on your win, Paul.

Janis Medders Tobechi October 3, 2019 at 4:08 PM Now that I have heard the song I can say it is a great job on your part. Difficult piece to conquer. Congratulations Paul. Paul Callus October 5, 2019 at 5:20 PM Thank you so much, Janis. Have a nice weekend. Regards // paul

Jeanne Mcgee October 3, 2019 at 2:05 PM I am so happy you placed high with this great poem/senryu. Congrats Paul Callus October 5, 2019 at 5:31 PM Thank you for sharing your happiness with me, Jeanne:) I was pleased to see your winning poem on the list! Regards // paul

Alexis Y. October 3, 2019 at 1:21 PM Hi Paul, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your winning write. Have a fantastic day my friend:-) Alexis

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart October 3, 2019 at 9:23 AM You captured the chill of that ballad with brilliance. Congratulations on your win and POTD honours Paul. xomo

Andrea Dietrich September 21, 2019 at 7:13 PM and now for my third comment!! Congrats on POTD. I have to do this since I can't find a new poem of yours to see! Paul Callus September 22, 2019 at 7:19 AM :) Thank you, Andrea :) Your perseverance is to be lauded. Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux September 17, 2019 at 7:52 AM A clever one. Congrats on your POTD. Paul Callus November 26, 2019 at 7:22 AM Thank you, Richard. Regards

Judy Ball September 15, 2019 at 11:27 AM Excellent Paul. A fine write. God Bless, JB Paul Callus September 16, 2019 at 2:50 PM Many thanks, Judy. Enjoy the new week. Regards // paul

Brenda Chiri September 15, 2019 at 2:19 AM I thought I had commented on this but I guess not!;) reminders of what was and the pain of it can be unbearable but a lovely write regardless!;) Paul Callus September 15, 2019 at 2:55 AM It happens to me too, Brenda; I suppose we have too many things on our minds! Thank you for the meaningful comments and the 'like'. Warm regards // paul

Alexis Y. September 10, 2019 at 12:34 PM Hi Paul, You did a great job with the contest theme. I don't think I know the song. Your poem compelles me to want to listen to it. Congratulations on getting the poem of day. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Have a great day my friend:-) Alexis Paul Callus September 10, 2019 at 1:07 PM Thank you for the complimentary remarks and congrats, Alexis. I hope that by now you have listened to the song; it tells such a sad story! Best regards, my friend. // paul

Swetha Vangaveti September 10, 2019 at 12:43 AM A short and poignant write. Congratulations on POTD. :) Paul Callus September 10, 2019 at 12:57 PM Thank you for the lovely comment and congrats, Swetha. ~ Regards // paul

Silent One September 8, 2019 at 3:19 PM Great poem for POTD... Congrats. Paul Callus September 9, 2019 at 7:17 AM Thank you for coming back with congrats, S-1. Regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos September 5, 2019 at 1:37 AM Calling back with congrats Paul - a wonderful poem deserved of POTD. Warm regards and hugs, Jenny. Paul Callus September 5, 2019 at 8:11 AM Ah! You did come back again, after all:) Thank you! Warm regards and hugs // paul

Heidi Sands September 4, 2019 at 7:31 PM Excellent Paul. Congratulations :) Paul Callus September 5, 2019 at 8:06 AM Thank you, Heidi:) Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich September 4, 2019 at 5:33 PM I guess I had not commented over here on it, Paul. I like it even more reading it here again. Great imagery. Paul Callus September 5, 2019 at 8:08 AM Thank you for a double reading, Andrea, and for your complimentary words:) Best regards // paul

Indiana Shaw September 3, 2019 at 10:16 PM Never a sadder tale in so few words spoken . . . : ( Paul Callus September 4, 2019 at 4:12 AM Thank you, Indy. Best regards // paul

Phil Capitano September 3, 2019 at 3:14 PM So much agony in so few words. Great job Paul and congrats on POTD. Paul Callus September 4, 2019 at 4:38 AM So pleased you liked it, Phil; thank you for commenting...and for the congrats. Regards // paul

Eve Roper September 3, 2019 at 2:51 PM Back with Congratulations on POTD.. Hugs Paul Callus September 4, 2019 at 4:39 AM Thank you, Eve. A pleasure to have you back:) hugs // paul

Brandy Nicole September 3, 2019 at 2:07 PM Very traumatic when something like this happens. You have expressed this moment, with such depth and emotion my dear friend. Congratulations Paul, on Poem of the Day. ~ Brandy Paul Callus September 4, 2019 at 4:57 AM Thank you, Brandy. Your lovely comments and congrats are much appreciated. ~ Warm regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong September 3, 2019 at 12:59 PM I saw this late and left a comment that showed up on Emile's page from when he got POTD yesterday Paul. I am so happy to see you receive the honor of POTD. It is well deserved with this wonderful gem of a senryu! Congratulations! : ) xxoo Paul Callus September 4, 2019 at 5:02 AM Thank you so very much, Connie. I was surprised that a simple three liner was awarded p.o.t.d. Your second visit is appreciated (so is the fave which you gifted me earlier.) Warm regards // paul

Ashok Kumar Mishra September 3, 2019 at 11:56 AM Congrats on POTD! Paul Callus September 4, 2019 at 5:03 AM Thank you, Ashok; pleased to make your acquaintance. // paul

1 2