Tom Cunningham Poet Sonnet

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Death of a Lancer

My one true love with eyes of sparkling blue
Our hearts as one it was our destiny
Heaven sent you for me and me for you
It would not last but end in tragedy.

War intervened I’d have to go away
To the Crimea with the light brigade
My true love I thought of every day
Our lives on hold along with plans we’d made.

The Captain said “suppress your greatest fears
Ride close ranks and do not come asunder”
The noise of hooves were ringing in my ears
Sounds they made were like a raging thunder.

A lance pierced me and off my horse I fell
Then death came down, my life I bid farewell.




Written on 7th February 2019.

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Line Gauthier March 12, 2019 at 6:54 PM Back with more congrats, Tom. Tom Cunningham March 13, 2019 at 5:10 AM Thank you Line. Tom.

Gregory Richard Barden March 10, 2019 at 9:38 PM What a wonderful Sonnet and ode to lives lost to the horrid waste of war, (one of my least favorite words) ... a subject dear to my heart. Superb write and congrats on your win, my friend! :-) Tom Cunningham March 11, 2019 at 6:39 AM Thank you very much Gregory, yes war is such a waste, so many lives lost needlessly, and it seems to create more problems than it solves. Tom.

Sandra Haight March 10, 2019 at 2:52 PM Tom, this is such an outstanding, well-written Sonnet. And yes...a lump in my through too. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest! Sandra :) Tom Cunningham March 10, 2019 at 5:19 PM Thank you very much Sandra, it is such a terrible waste of lives, there has to be a better way. Tom.

Janice Canerdy March 8, 2019 at 9:31 PM CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win, Tom! Janice Tom Cunningham March 9, 2019 at 6:55 AM Thank you very much Janice. Tom.

Eve Roper March 8, 2019 at 9:00 PM Congratulations on your well written win, Tom, enjoyed reading it again. Have a nice weekend. hugs Eve ~,* Tom Cunningham March 9, 2019 at 6:54 AM You too Eve, thank you. Tom.

Timothy Mcguire March 8, 2019 at 6:10 PM Nice win Tom! Tom Cunningham March 9, 2019 at 6:48 AM Thank you Timothy. Tom.

Mark Toney March 8, 2019 at 6:00 PM Tom, I love the way you're able to put us right there in the scene. How quickly lives are lost in battle! Your picture is perfect. Congratulations on your win on Mile 22 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon Contest! Thank you so much for supporting my contests. By continuing to place in the contests you are accumulating points toward the final, which is just 5 contests away! ~Mark Tom Cunningham March 9, 2019 at 6:54 AM Thank you Mark for my placement, even today hundreds of lives lost in needless wars, if only people would talk and compromise. Tom.

Line Gauthier February 27, 2019 at 10:08 PM Well penned, Tom. Congrats on your well deserved win. Tom Cunningham February 28, 2019 at 11:11 AM Thank you line. Tom

Jennifer Proxenos February 14, 2019 at 9:31 AM Hi Tom, The Crimean war - that was part of our syllabus at school - you penned this poem so realistically that I found myself running away from this battle, and then suddenly, I came back down to earth and realized I wasn't among the horses hooves - a terrific poem! Poetry hugs, Jennifer. Tom Cunningham February 14, 2019 at 10:39 AM Thank you Jennifer, I bet it must have been spectacular to see but horrendous for those involved in it. Tom.

CayCay Godwin February 13, 2019 at 11:48 AM Very, very good! The drama was excellently delivered within 14 lines; I could feel his pain - you did that. This is moving, one that is hard to shake off. All the best ... CayCay Tom Cunningham February 13, 2019 at 12:29 PM Thank you CayCay, sonnets do restrict you a bit, I could have said a lot more . Tom

Nette Onclaud February 12, 2019 at 2:16 PM :) Tom Cunningham February 12, 2019 at 2:41 PM Hi nette, hope your week is going well.

Avis Bailey February 12, 2019 at 9:51 AM Randomly reading poetry this a m, Tom. I came across yours and enjoyed your pen. There's nothing better than love and war. Realizing war claims so many lives, each with a life. much can be said in few words. Tom Cunningham February 12, 2019 at 9:54 AM Thank you very much Avis, I'm happy you enjoyed it. Tom.

Charles Messina February 11, 2019 at 8:28 AM Great write Tom. The last lines were perfect. Enjoyed this. Charlie Tom Cunningham February 11, 2019 at 9:00 AM Thank you very much Charlie, happy you liked it. Tom.

Kai Michael Neumann February 11, 2019 at 4:18 AM Very sad but well executed ... if you pardon the pun. Tom Cunningham February 11, 2019 at 8:55 AM Thank you very much Kai, like your comment. Tom.

Gershon Wolf February 10, 2019 at 10:01 PM Hey, this could even have been set in the Russia of today (or 2014, at least). Interesting ink, Tom! ~ Gershon Tom Cunningham February 11, 2019 at 2:32 AM Thanks Gershon, the charge of the light brigade was down to bad intel, instead of facing ground troops they rode into the might of the Russian artillery, it was carnage. Tom.

Andrea Dietrich February 10, 2019 at 7:38 PM Great theme for the sonnet form, Tom. Sad ending! Tom Cunningham February 11, 2019 at 2:29 AM Thank you Andrea, Hope all's well. Tom.

Mystic Rose Rose February 10, 2019 at 5:47 PM Death by war can be a cruel joke and love is the greatest sacrifice we pay at times like these. Well written dear Tom xo Tom Cunningham February 11, 2019 at 2:27 AM Thank you very much Pixie. Tom.

Carolyn Devonshire February 10, 2019 at 3:59 PM How I love poems that tell stories and the sonnet lends easily to narrations of love and war. I was fully engrossed in the action, Tom, and though the ending is sad, it is still uplifting to know this warrior had known love in his lifetime. Excellent writing, my friend. Love, Carolyn Tom Cunningham February 11, 2019 at 2:27 AM Thank you Carolyn, I imagine that this happens a lot,soldiers finding love but never to return to their loved one. Tom.

Gordon Mcconnell February 10, 2019 at 1:57 PM Fine writing Tom, really enjoyed reading this. Well done indeed! Tom Cunningham February 10, 2019 at 2:18 PM Thank you very much Gordon, I'm happy that you enjoyed it. Tom.

Robert Lindley February 10, 2019 at 9:29 AM Truly exquisite verses in this superbly crafted sonnet my dear friend! War is hell regardless of the victor's joy. Yet bravery is not a negative, even tho' one may abhor war. For bravery shows the courage, valor and faith men have in a just cause and in a sacrifice (if need be) to gain such.. A fav, a great and inspiring poem for me to find and read this morn. Tom Cunningham February 10, 2019 at 1:30 PM Thank you very much Robert, your kind comments mean a lot and are very much appreciated. Tom.

Nette Onclaud February 10, 2019 at 9:13 AM jet lagging?.. happy weekend, tom!..huggs Tom Cunningham February 10, 2019 at 1:28 PM No Nette, I'm firmly at home for the moment lol. Hope you have a good weekend too. Tom.

Lindsay Laurie February 8, 2019 at 6:55 PM G'day Tom … a nice sonnet with a topic that goes well with them. Over time, there has never been an alternative to war that destroys so many families - thank you Tom - Lindsay Tom Cunningham February 9, 2019 at 7:42 AM Thanks Lindsay, I'm sure if politicians' tried harder many of these conflicts' could be avoided, man never learns. Tom.

Anne-Lise Andresen February 8, 2019 at 1:27 PM - So many brave people who died ... they lived with fear, 24/7 ... cruel to think about - Great written, Tom - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Tom Cunningham February 8, 2019 at 4:05 PM Thanks Sunshine, wars seem to be the norm, have been happening since time began, such a tragic waste of life, it never really solves problems, look at the middle east. Tom.

Eve Roper February 8, 2019 at 10:12 AM Wonderful read, Tom, what they and all of war suffer a time of war.Have a nice weekend and may you have a great Valentine’s Day. hugs Eve Tom Cunningham February 8, 2019 at 4:02 PM Thank you very much Eve, I hope you too have a lovely weekend. Tom.

Swetha Vangaveti February 8, 2019 at 5:57 AM It's an honour to die a warrior's death. Not everyone would dare. Great poem :) Tom Cunningham February 8, 2019 at 7:59 AM Thanks Swetha, it would take a lot of courage for sure. Tom.

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