Death Grip

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The heart disease would be his final fate His smoking cigarettes had brought him low Only a short time before he would go She tried to care for him in his final hour In delirium he would pull off his clothes Walk about the house totally exposed In this sad state he went to sleep somehow All night long she slept a sweet sound sleep He's found Gripping a pull-up bar in death He held on for dear life even though deceased What sight did he face in that final hour Based on truth... Revision Death Grip The heart disease would be his final fate His smoking three packs a day had brought him low ‘Twas a short time before his death would come In delirium he would pull off his clothes Walk about his body totally exposed In this sad state he went to sleep somehow His wife slept a sweet sound sleep next to him She awakened to this grief filled sight The death angel came during the night Death grabbed him while he held on for dear life What sight/s did he see before he did go

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Lewis Raynes

Date: 12/27/2017 4:16:00 PM

Wow, this is such a confronting poem, beautiful, makes me wonder how I'll go.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 12/27/2017 6:03:00 PM

Lewis, Thanks for stopping by..It does make us stop and think from time to time what will be the circumstances of our death..I hope that you have a sweet quiet passing from death unto life..Sara

Russell Sivey

Date: 10/30/2017 6:19:00 AM

Wow, what a powerful write my friend! Such a sad subject, but things like this do happen! I heard that after the dead hold onto something at the final moments, their grip in iron tight! I'm not sure if this is true, but I've heard that! You have written such a magnificent poem based on the death's door! Great Work my friend!!

Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/30/2017 6:26:00 AM

Russell, The person who was there when the funeral home came to get him said they had to prize his hand from the pull-bar..I observed his hand in the casket and it looked as though he had held onto something in death..Soup mail..Sara

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/30/2017 6:11:00 AM

So sad--yet a powerful description of final moments!

Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/30/2017 6:24:00 AM

Vijay, Thanks for the visit to my page..I appreciate the time spent here..Yes, in it is sad in so many ways..His early death could have been prevented if only he had quit..Sara