Death Dream

To feel like dying, how would you tell it.
like standing in the desert gasping life.
The hot sun hitting your back, sight blackens,
heat now so intense the oxygen's gone.
Lungs feel they are caving in, gasp for air.

Falling now into a deep dark cold hole,
no vision, just darkness, maybe dampness.
A rainbow of colors brightly appear,
tingling like tree roots in a tunnel.
Foul earthen smell as you gasp last life breath.

Sounds so strange, ringing in a distant light,
Family pictures fading from the mind.
Trying to say "good-bye", words do not come,
struggling to move a hand or a finger.
Want to close my eyes, but nothing happens.

Will I be wolken with the next day light,
find the bottom of death dreams final pit?

( I wrote this after a friend commited suicide, and also sparked by Emily Dickinson " It was 
not death for I stood up." )

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 4/12/2009 2:34:00 PM
I love the imagery that stand up and greets the imagination! Keep sharing- darkpoet
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Date: 2/20/2009 4:24:00 PM
Glad you wrote this, Judy. Sometimes when tragic things happen writing can help to change our perspective and the Soup has been a wonderful place for me to do that! Congratulations on your writing being featured this week and I look forward to reading others!!
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Date: 2/20/2009 6:07:00 AM
This is incredibly beautiful. If you had a dream like this then it's amazing how you put it into words. If not it's even more amazing how you came up with this imagery.
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Date: 2/19/2009 6:45:00 AM
Congrats on beinf featured a great choice :)
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Date: 2/17/2009 1:13:00 PM
Congrats Judy, on the refeaturing of "Death Dream." Vince
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Date: 2/16/2009 5:14:00 PM
Accept my sympathy on the loss of your friend. It's sad that people feel so trapped and hopeless that it gets to this. The vivid imagery carries your thoughts. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Karen
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Date: 2/15/2009 9:37:00 PM
Judy there is one overhaul truth regarding life and that is that the cost of it is death - I reckon the longer we live the more even the cost - Congrats on being featured - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 2/1/2009 9:43:00 AM
Judy, always remember that life is just the beginning and death a transition. you will meet again at the clearing at the end of the path, for thats wat life is, a path that must eventually end, and i believe it will end in a clearing where we will all meet the loved ones we lost. love for all the world, Ridge
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Date: 1/23/2009 2:56:00 PM
Well written and sadly expressed...Just wanted to say hold your head up high, stay strong, have faith, take your burdens to the lord and lean on him, he will carry you through...Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week..God Bless you*Tyesha
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Date: 1/23/2009 1:28:00 PM
Judy Sorry about your friend but a well written poem Congratulations on your featured poem of the week! Laura :)
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Date: 1/23/2009 8:03:00 AM
Congratulations Judy, on "Death Dream" being featured. Vince
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Date: 1/22/2009 10:24:00 AM
Judy - I just wanted to say congratulations on having your poetry featured this week – God Bless, MJ
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Date: 1/19/2009 4:18:00 PM
congrats on your lovely poetry being featured this week!* love **Maryam**
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Date: 1/19/2009 11:27:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Judy. May you have many more. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/19/2009 8:57:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved featured write. Love, Shar
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Date: 1/10/2009 10:39:00 PM
Judy, Welcome to thr SOUP, YOUR first poem is very gripping The footnote entices the POEM Emily Dickinson is one of my favorites Again Welcome YOU will meet many great POETS here Keep Writing YOUR POETRY Friend...HG
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Date: 1/6/2009 11:56:00 AM
Hi Judy and welcome to PoetrySoup. So sorry about the loss of your friend. You certainly have captured what death might be like. Well written poetry on a disturbing subject, especially taking your poor friend into consideration. Love, Shar
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Date: 1/5/2009 5:15:00 PM
Judy well I reckon you awoke and thank God your still here - I just wanted to welcome you to the Soup - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 1/5/2009 10:30:00 AM
Super alliteration and striking imagery... (sounds like my 'Being and Nothingness') and no, I'm not asking for a review! Well done Judy! Best wishes, Keith
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