Sunita U.D Palawon Poet Etheree

Death

Death
Soft feet
You came by
In hard blow to
Wipe so many lives
Not a second did they
Have to make but a last wish
Which for sure would be “GOD SAVE ME."
Though god would not have listened or come
To stop time or reverse your action, rash!



Resubmitted 10/10/16
Written on 23/07/16
55 syllables (HowManySyllables.com)

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Connie Marcum Wong July 27, 2016 at 1:05 AM A profound write Sunita. You write well! 7 ; ) Sunita U.D Palawon July 27, 2016 at 2:04 AM Thanks, you like it and for the high rating! Unfor. got N/A :D Sunita.

David Smith July 24, 2016 at 6:20 AM It it what it is. Yet your words somehow put beauty there and a warning to us all. Death does not always knock before entering. I think your writing is more about life than death. Excellent use of available syllables. Good luck for contest David. Sunita U.D Palawon July 24, 2016 at 7:38 AM Thanks for going through the poem and for your valuable comment. :) Sunita

Andrea Dietrich July 23, 2016 at 10:29 AM the topic is very good for etheree form. a little suggestion , use have instead of had on line seven. Then it will be perfect! Sunita U.D Palawon July 23, 2016 at 12:03 PM Thanks for going through it my dear, and thanks for the suggestion. GL to you. Love Sunita

Karam Misra July 23, 2016 at 7:51 AM Nicely expressed, Sunita! Death surely comes with no warning these days. All the best for the contest. ~karam~ Sunita U.D Palawon July 23, 2016 at 10:26 AM Hmm..Glad you like it, its my first trial of Etheree. Thanks. Sunita :)