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death

Time fell fast Things became hard Worries were vast Lives begain scared Hopes endlessly hidden All things seemed forbidden Days filled with darkness Lives consumed and left sparkless Awaiting the doom Sitting only in gloom Heaven wept No souls were kept

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 7/17/2012 1:00:00 AM
Could be a much better poem if more heart and effort were put into it. Regardless, its essence as a poem can be salvaged if the author wants to rescue it from its current state.
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Date: 7/18/2012 1:25:00 AM
maybe next time I like it