Dear Death

When the waves were high
and the storm was raging.
I eluded you and went forward.
I was stumbling but i tried to save.
A sense of foreboding passed
through me but I sighed.

The breeze was cold and calm
but slowly it changed into harsh..
I was alone and afraid,
I cried in the cockpit because
my ship was out of control.

The things were going wrong,
tears were rolling down.
I knew I was about to die.
For that I laid down,
keeping the things aside.
I commemorate the old times.

In a forlorn manner,
I was busy remembering
every second of my good memories.
I enjoyed the last moment of my life.
my lashes got wet,
the sound got calm,
my closed eyes shine,
light scattered around.

I looked up to the sky
the fresh and sunny day,
Was happy a bit for the 
gloom had gone.
Oh scary night, fare you well!
Oh stormy winds, fare you well!
Oh misty sky, fare you well!

Oh dear Death, fare you well!
because my life has overthrown you.
The darkness is gone
The life has won...
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


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Date: 1/24/2017 4:45:00 PM
I am so glad about the brightness. Always look at the dawn in the beginning of a beautiful morning. Absolutely wonderful poem
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Aarushi Pandey
Date: 1/24/2017 8:22:00 PM
Thank you so much. A new dawn and a new starting :)
Date: 2/29/2016 4:24:00 AM
Hi Aarushi.....I like how you built up your poem, painting a dark and hopeless situation, till finally you conquer futility with your positive attitude...light winning over darkness! ~ All the best // paul
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Aarushi Pandey
Date: 3/1/2016 7:25:00 AM
Thank you :D
Date: 2/21/2016 3:48:00 PM
good one... LINDA
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Aarushi Pandey
Date: 3/1/2016 7:25:00 AM
Thank you :D
Date: 1/29/2016 7:42:00 AM
Thanks for taking my small suggestion. Hugs Rick.
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Date: 1/28/2016 8:09:00 AM
Third line consider I eluded you and went forward" it is a small change but it will add power to your narrative. I enjoyed this triumphant piece. Well I expressed!
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Aarushi Pandey
Date: 1/29/2016 5:14:00 AM
thank you so much for the advice sir :):) I did it :) just a beginner and that's why I'm happy people are advising here :) thanks :')
Date: 1/26/2016 3:37:00 PM
a very interesting way of facing death and I love the last line: The life has won!!!
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Aarushi Pandey
Date: 1/27/2016 8:52:00 AM
thank you so much dear :)
Date: 1/25/2016 4:01:00 PM
It is a happy day when the darkness has passed...lovely poem
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Aarushi Pandey
Date: 1/26/2016 12:36:00 AM
Tim smith, great to know you loved it :) I'm so happy to get an appreciation from one of my fav poet on poetrysoup :)
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