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Daydream

Up with sun at the crack of the dawn Bluebirds are playing and singing sweet songs Two deer are feeding on the edge of the field The west wind is blowing all my cares away Mist is rising off the shimmering lake Lost in in the glory No more can I take Looking around at all the beauty and grace I can only imagine the look on your face The time I first met you The stars shone so bright The full moon was rising Illuminating the night That look in your eyes When I leaned in for a kiss The words that you said On the falling star wish Daydream of that night as I look at the lake Come into my dreams and we'll never wake

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 12/20/2014 8:19:00 AM
Tim, the flow of "Daydream" is almost hypnotic. It bids us to partake, and then we're singing. Happy HOlidays. irisrose...
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Date: 12/14/2014 1:03:00 AM
Very pretty - and sweet.
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Date: 12/10/2014 12:58:00 PM
Could one live in the world build by him or herself? The poem is like a garden in which the poet walks till the labyrinth,then desperately open different doors in search of the own Paradise.I enjoyed this call:"Come into my dreams/and we'll never wake..." I imagine a poem in which each character lives in the dream of another character.Whose dream is big enough and generous enough to became the housing of humanity, but not a simple shelter? You also walk in beauty...
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Date: 11/28/2014 10:32:00 AM
beautifully painted piece tim excellent pen pal
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/28/2014 10:34:00 AM
Thank you liam my friend...cheers
Date: 11/24/2014 12:39:00 PM
Splendid melodic write Tim!
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/24/2014 12:40:00 PM
Thank you Ken...cheers
Date: 11/24/2014 9:38:00 AM
This one sings beautifully. An excellent romantic rhymed poem.
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/24/2014 12:20:00 PM
Thank you my good friend....cheers
Date: 11/24/2014 9:09:00 AM
so elegant and tenderly romantic, tim... you make me sigh!.. huggs
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/24/2014 12:20:00 PM
Thank you nette....hugs Tim
Date: 11/23/2014 10:41:00 PM
Sweet and romantic. as always!!!
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/23/2014 10:50:00 PM
Thanks Andrea...hugs Tim
Date: 11/23/2014 9:35:00 PM
Another beautiful romantic write, like how you intertwined nature and love here.
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/23/2014 10:35:00 PM
Thank you my friend.... Cheers
Date: 11/23/2014 1:54:00 PM
Quite a passionate write Tim! Last stanza says it all! Superb !!
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/23/2014 1:57:00 PM
Thank you Upma..you are too kind... Hugs Tim
Date: 11/23/2014 1:21:00 PM
Wonderful write, a diamond of a dream. hugsxx
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/23/2014 1:56:00 PM
Thanks Cas we all want our dreams to come true
Date: 11/23/2014 1:08:00 PM
You take the reader on a journey wishing for eternal sleep by that lake.I am going to favo(u)r this beauty.Extremely Romantic.:.)Charma
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/23/2014 1:10:00 PM
Thank you sweet Charma....I do love romance....hugs Tim
Date: 11/23/2014 1:00:00 PM
Romantic and sweet....a real treat...
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/23/2014 1:01:00 PM
Thank you Eileen... Hugs my friend
Date: 11/23/2014 12:57:00 PM
nice romantic dream:-) hugs janx
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Tim Smith
Date: 11/23/2014 12:59:00 PM
Thanks Jan...hope all is well...hugs Tim

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