Daydream

Up with sun at the crack of the dawn Bluebirds are playing and singing sweet songs Two deer are feeding on the edge of the field The west wind is blowing all my cares away Mist is rising off the shimmering lake Lost in in the glory No more can I take Looking around at all the beauty and grace I can only imagine the look on your face The time I first met you The stars shone so bright The full moon was rising Illuminating the night That look in your eyes When I leaned in for a kiss The words that you said On the falling star wish Daydream of that night as I look at the lake Come into my dreams and we'll never wake
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Sankey- Lewis Avatar
December 20, 2014 at 8:19 AM
Tim, the flow of "Daydream" is almost hypnotic. It bids us to partake, and then we're singing. Happy HOlidays. irisrose...
Prosvirnin Avatar
December 14, 2014 at 1:03 AM
Very pretty - and sweet.
Bocsa Avatar
December 10, 2014 at 12:58 PM
Could one live in the world build by him or herself? The poem is like a garden in which the poet walks till the labyrinth,then desperately open different doors in search of the own Paradise.I enjoyed this call:"Come into my dreams/and we'll never wake..." I imagine a poem in which each character lives in the dream of another character.Whose dream is big enough and generous enough to became the housing of humanity, but not a simple shelter? You also walk in beauty...
Mcdaid Avatar
November 28, 2014 at 10:32 AM
beautifully painted piece tim excellent pen pal
Smith Avatar
November 28, 2014 at 10:34 AM
Thank you liam my friend...cheers
Carroll Avatar
November 24, 2014 at 12:39 PM
Splendid melodic write Tim!
Smith Avatar
November 24, 2014 at 12:40 PM
Thank you Ken...cheers
Yvonne Avatar
November 24, 2014 at 9:38 AM
This one sings beautifully. An excellent romantic rhymed poem.
Smith Avatar
November 24, 2014 at 12:20 PM
Thank you my good friend....cheers
Onclaud Avatar
November 24, 2014 at 9:09 AM
so elegant and tenderly romantic, tim... you make me sigh!.. huggs
Smith Avatar
November 24, 2014 at 12:20 PM
Thank you nette....hugs Tim
Dietrich Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 10:41 PM
Sweet and romantic. as always!!!
Smith Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 10:50 PM
Thanks Andrea...hugs Tim
Vaso Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 9:35 PM
Another beautiful romantic write, like how you intertwined nature and love here.
Smith Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 10:35 PM
Thank you my friend.... Cheers
A. Sharma Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 1:54 PM
Quite a passionate write Tim! Last stanza says it all! Superb !!
Smith Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 1:57 PM
Thank you Upma..you are too kind... Hugs Tim
Nance Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 1:21 PM
Wonderful write, a diamond of a dream. hugsxx
Smith Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 1:56 PM
Thanks Cas we all want our dreams to come true
Chircop Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 1:08 PM
You take the reader on a journey wishing for eternal sleep by that lake.I am going to favo(u)r this beauty.Extremely Romantic.:.)Charma
Smith Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 1:10 PM
Thank you sweet Charma....I do love romance....hugs Tim
Manassian Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 1:00 PM
Romantic and sweet....a real treat...
Smith Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 1:01 PM
Thank you Eileen... Hugs my friend
Allison Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 12:57 PM
nice romantic dream:-) hugs janx
Smith Avatar
November 23, 2014 at 12:59 PM
Thanks Jan...hope all is well...hugs Tim
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