Day Trip

underneath a fire
   velocity of the flames
      running back and forth
         from feather tip to arrow
       sharpened in fixed direction
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Etgen-Baker Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 6:14 PM
powerful imagery and poem. Loved it have a splendid evening, hugs, Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 6:18 PM
Thank you dear one!
Dietrich Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 4:14 PM
Great image you created, Kim
Rodrigues Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 6:19 PM
I appreciate that, Andrea!
Hind Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 3:26 PM
Wow, Kim- amazing look at fire, "velocity of the flames running back and forth" <3 sweet reading you this evening, I look forward to seeing what you will come up with next
Rodrigues Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 6:19 PM
Thank you so much ! You are a sweet one.
Goldsmith Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 11:38 AM
I enjoyed reading your fun "Day Trip" write. "Good Luck" if for a contest. Have a wonderful day/week writing away............
Rodrigues Avatar
September 29, 2025 at 6:20 PM
Thank you Paula!
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