Mohan Chutani Poet Rhyme

Dawn On Fire

blown apart her lewd locks of hair 
stretching arch ready to ensnare
the dawn sets itself on fire

rain hurries down to douse the heat
soaked wet, vanity you secrete 
earth also smells full with desire 

hard log flamed, I burned to ash soft
now I lie, on the ground, pride lost
unsated, some more you require

Nove Otto- 9 lines, syllable count 8,8,8,8,8,8,8,8,8
Contest: Light a Flame!
Sponsor: Nette Onclaud
write: 14.6.2014
Mohan Chutani

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Robert Lindley June 22, 2014 at 12:57 PM Congrats on a fine win!!!!

Andrea Dietrich June 21, 2014 at 6:19 PM very nicely done, Mohan, Congrats on your awesome win. Mohan Chutani June 21, 2014 at 7:06 PM Thank you Andrea. Mohan

Dr. Upma A. Sharma June 21, 2014 at 5:47 AM Amazing write Mohan ! congrats on top merited win ! Nette's contests r tough n its all the more diff to score so high ! but u did it my dear friend ! Mohan Chutani June 21, 2014 at 6:08 AM Thanks Upma, your encouragement means a lot to me. Mohan

Faye Gibson June 20, 2014 at 6:16 PM Mohan...you just blew the top off of this one. Great win. Congratulations. Mohan Chutani June 20, 2014 at 8:57 PM Thanks Faye, I still feel that I have to learn a lot for you all experienced and distinguished poets out there. Mohan

Jan Allison June 20, 2014 at 3:05 PM fabulous Mohan a well deserved winner. Hugs jan xxxx Mohan Chutani June 20, 2014 at 8:58 PM Jan, thanks for your constant support. Mohan

Nette Onclaud June 20, 2014 at 2:46 PM stunning, impressive, and beautifully written piece that you have strung together with such vivid imagery.. this artwork comes to life for me, mohan.. cheers for the big win in my challenge.. huggs Mohan Chutani June 20, 2014 at 9:02 PM Nette, a great thank you for this very big encouragement. Before the contest was judged, I did not get any comment on this write from anyone thinking that I had got it terribly wrong. I cherished your challenge and had tried to put in my best. Glad came out flaming in the end. love and huggs. Mohan

Mark J. Halliday June 20, 2014 at 1:49 PM Congratulations on your win. MJH Mohan Chutani June 20, 2014 at 1:52 PM grateful, Mark. Mohan

Arlene Smith June 20, 2014 at 1:00 PM Congrats on a great win Mohan!.. Hugs.. Arlene Mohan Chutani June 20, 2014 at 1:51 PM Thanks Arlene.