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Premiere Contest WinnerDarkness Versus Light

Here I am again, the familiar forest;
this time, darker than usual, except
for the faint light of the moon
hidden behind the tall pine trees.  
The light is opaque and I am finding
it annoying as it plays hide and seek 
through an oval opening here and there.

Deeper in I walk, and then that awful,
grim and gruesome thought takes 
over me...that I may come face to face
again with that vicious, vindictive 
beast in this dark forest.  I know it is 
here...I've seen it before...it rises like a
tall, giant monolith, like something 
I've seen in a museum.  I am so
frightened.  Why do I patronize this
place when I always have fear as a 
prelude to stay away!  Is it pride...
the need to escape and feel victorious? 
 
Suddenly light!  Oh yes...I am awake!
And how fortunate I feel...amazing!  
Just my recurring dream.  How delightful 
my nightmare is over.  The brilliance of 
light has overcome my darkness once more!


Sandra M. Haight

~1st Place~
Premiere Contest: Make a Poem *2 ~ Darkness Versus Light
Sponsor: Shadow Hamilton
Judged: 07/27/2016

Required words to use: awful, amazing, annoying. grim, 
gruesome, delightful.frightened, fortunate, finding, monolith, 
moon, museum.oval, opaque, opening, patronize, pride, prelude.
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Daniel Avatar
August 1, 2016 at 1:42 AM
Congratulations on your win:) Really lovely write:)
Lamoureux Avatar
July 29, 2016 at 8:05 AM
What great story telling! Congrats on your top win.
Neumann Avatar
July 28, 2016 at 8:21 AM
Congratulations. I can see this a a dream and as depressed mood swings. I like that openness and especially 'the light playing hide and seek'.
Kimathi Avatar
July 28, 2016 at 7:25 AM
Congrats Sandra, for your well, deserved first placement in the contest!! ;-)
Smith Avatar
July 28, 2016 at 6:31 AM
Just knew this had to be a winner, congratulations Sandra...
Godwin Avatar
July 28, 2016 at 12:04 AM
My gosh, Sandra - that is no less than perfect. In no way does it lack genuine, sincere, finely woven flow. Just perfect. An awe ... CayCay
U.D Palawon  Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 11:10 PM
Congrats on your trophy win Sandra, a great poem indeed! :) Sunita
Rodrigues Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 7:48 PM
Great write, Sandra! How different things look in the light of day! Congratulations!
Y. Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 7:08 PM
Hi Sandra(Mrs.), You have done a phenomenal job, and this piece is well deserving of first place hands down. Congratulations! :-) Alexis
Allison Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 6:44 PM
dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs jan xx
Roper Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 6:08 PM
Congratulations, Sandra, 1 st place. great write. Hugs Eve
Hamilton Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 5:57 PM
superb Sandra congrats on 1st place hugs
Haight Avatar
July 29, 2016 at 2:00 PM
Hi, Shadow. I was away for three days and I am finally getting back to PS comments, etc. Thank you again for another great contest, and I am so very honored and appreciative with the wonderful First Place Trophy placement! Thanks again. Hugs, Sandra
Daniel Avatar
July 19, 2016 at 5:00 AM
Great take on the theme:) All the best:)
Ashe Avatar
July 14, 2016 at 9:00 PM
This title grabbed me right away and the piece came back to the Light in the most good feeling way to know that it was but a dream that ended overcoming the darkness! I enjoyed this very much! The best to you in this contest! :-)
Haight Avatar
July 15, 2016 at 8:20 AM
Thank you so much, Walter. The title sounds more serious than the write, but that is where my muse led me! Thanks for the visit and supportive comment. Sandra
Allison Avatar
July 14, 2016 at 9:52 AM
Wow Sandra you are so good at these challenges Shadow sets - i predict another podium place:-) hugs jan xx
Haight Avatar
July 14, 2016 at 10:08 AM
Thank you so much for your positive and encouraging comment, Jan. Not sure the approach to the theme is what she is looking for, but we'll see. I did have fun working on it, and that's what counts! Hugs, Sandra
Shanmugam Avatar
July 14, 2016 at 9:08 AM
Amazing poem ya..sure sweep;)
Haight Avatar
July 14, 2016 at 10:09 AM
Thank you again, Madhupriya! I appreciate your visit and supportive comment! Hugs, Sandra
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