Dark Sea

Brash the dark-sea sounds stars steer the gleaming wave's blades the impending clash

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Eve Roper

Date: 11/25/2016 8:33:00 PM

this is so lovely, Robert when we were younger we use to camp by the ocean and it is so fascinating to be around the cool breeze, the crash of the waves, the moon light sparkling shadows over the surface, the scent of the air w-o-n-d-e-r-f-u-l. A poem inspired :) Hugs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/27/2016 8:07:00 PM

Cool rhyming between beginning and end, Robert. It could be a new form of KU!

Paloma P

Date: 10/27/2016 3:08:00 AM

Succinct, yet effective Robert.

Paloma P
Date: 10/27/2016 4:50:00 AM

Ass-prints in the sand, I just noticed that! :) You should definitely write it...

Robert Warlov
Date: 10/27/2016 3:29:00 AM

Succinct because it's a Haiku, but fails to adhere to the other "rules", like the mindset that governs their purpose: the elucidation of natures concomitants with the oriental mythos.

White Wolf

Date: 10/26/2016 11:35:00 PM

Hahaha, I just read your comment below. But love this haiku! You are a funny man Robert! Thanks for the laugh mate

Robert Warlov
Date: 10/26/2016 11:50:00 PM

Thanks Rick. The depression was long ago. I love Haiku, but the form is so exacting- so brief to illuminate, inspire, or convey wisdom. I think it brings us closer to the truth within ourselves. The poem writes itself.

Robert Warlov

Date: 10/26/2016 10:33:00 PM

When people see me, they know they don't love me, so, depressed, I go to the beach at night. -- Question: Did any poet ever write about ass-prints in the sand?