Dark Pathway

The Heart of LOVE enveloped YOU and  --   I
In the course of EVERLASTING LOVE I   --   Failed
My minute blacken heart would not let you -  In
Looking back through time I do see a Pure  -- Life
The watches, Grandfather clocks of  Time  --    Running
Oblivious to the feeling of pain from  Falling   --  Down
Stumble over nothing along midnight Black    --   Paths
Following an unseen grotesque horned being   --   Leading
My uncleansed Soul across my Death’s river    --   Toward 
An Eternal Damnation living in a blazing Hot    ---    Hell
 
Dedicated To my POETRY Brother, Ruben Ortellao ( YOUR Turn )

Author's Note : This is a New Form of POETRY Dane-Ann and I are Trying
to get started We Call It " End Line Word POETRY "
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 2/24/2010 3:16:00 PM
Excellent write, a bit dark, but well written end line poem. Ellen
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Date: 2/12/2010 1:38:00 PM
I can hear your voice in this write. My minute blacken heart would not let you - In, reminds me of a grude so dark.that it would blind you.even in the most greatest of love.or either they know.but only want revenge.why..im not sure.but it is so tragic. and the outcome,only imagine.and i don't think im a princess>.< hah.but that is very kind of you to say.poetess sounds like a beautiful word. and im sorry,i will write more.i know there is not that many.until next time thank you -Always Lynn
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Date: 2/8/2010 3:17:00 PM
This is another nice one...and a deserving dedication to a very tallented poet...Enjoyed...Marty
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Date: 2/7/2010 12:45:00 PM
I see Ruben finally got to see this dedication--I let him know that it was here. Sounds like you made his day. Thank you for your kind words on my attempt at this new form. I have read some of the others at The Soup. The form is taking off. It was fun for me to try and a bit challenging too. Thank you to you and Dane for developing this creative form. Have a nice day! Karen
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Date: 2/6/2010 12:05:00 PM
Wonderful dedication to Ruben! There is a lot of depth for the reader to think about here. Fitting title. HG--I did try a "End Line Word" poem that I posted today called "Harmony." It was interesting to work with. Keep on writing. Have a good weekend. Karen
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Date: 2/2/2010 3:44:00 AM
Definitely a different form in which one would have to apply some deep thinking. Sara
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Date: 2/1/2010 7:53:00 PM
Great write HG and u have a great partner in writing with Dane Ann for this new form.. your words are deeply touching... will have to try this form myself soon... luv.. to u with lots of blessings with the luv.. "Sweetheart"
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Date: 2/1/2010 6:49:00 PM
an interesting new form for us to try HG. God Bless Phyl
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Date: 2/1/2010 4:34:00 PM
interesting... maybe i'll try it :) good write! ------Ell
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Date: 2/1/2010 4:15:00 PM
Hi HG, It's nice to see our new form in use. This one is really good. Be sure to check out mine. They are listed as narratives and were written on Jan. 27th. I guess I'll have to go check out Ruben's poem(s). One thing for sure... it's fun! Keep those words going... to the end!!! LOL Lovingly, Dane
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