Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Poet Iambic Pentameter

Dark Libertine

Tattered clobbered thoughts streaming to winged dusts,
spiral spasms tremble amid weary sounds.
The festal moods swing dreary interludes,
visions ache release with defloration--

throaty cries heightens the greedy man's lust.
He longs to possess the murmur of blood
from naked images throbbing desires,
it surges -- tinged to his cerebellum.

Dark libertine drained his desirous juice--
madness stings deep-- displayed to his ardor.
Boorish bashfulness etched into each itch
cracking unto his left to right onslaught.

Finitude fair Venus choked with disgust
as she wriggles, wriggles to free herself!
Her wriggles useless from black libertine...
Pristine Venus fallen-- now wanting death.


©O. E. Guillermo
5:15pm December 05, 2014
Sponsor	Giorgio A. V.
Contest Name	Structured forms - Iambic verse - Sketch a fictitious character - (Top Gun Poetry) 
Placed 6th

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Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 17, 2015 at 11:36 AM Congrats on ur wonderful winning poem Olive ! Great work on dark poetry!

Skat A August 16, 2015 at 9:51 PM Hi Olive, Congrats on your win. ~SKAT~

Alexis Y. August 14, 2015 at 8:14 PM Olive, l just stopped by to say congrats on your win:-)Alexis Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser August 21, 2015 at 12:45 AM Thanks much Alexis.. =`)

Poet Destroyer A August 14, 2015 at 7:10 PM Olive, :) Congratulations on your awesome win. Stop by my latest blog "Poem for One Victim" if you'd like or have time. Always & Forever ~LINDA~ Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser August 21, 2015 at 12:44 AM Thanks much Linda.. I ahve not been in Soup this past days 'cause of personal reasons. Thanks much for seeing this poem as a worthy winner.. !=`)

Poet Destroyer A April 26, 2015 at 4:40 PM :):) :)LINDA Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 22, 2015 at 7:57 PM :D

Poet Destroyer A December 26, 2014 at 9:26 PM OLIVE, CONGRATS on your win, in Giorgio A. V's contest... Take Care ~LINDA Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 26, 2014 at 11:39 PM Lolly Linda thanks much.. hugs and hugs.. :)

Brenda Meier-Hans December 18, 2014 at 8:44 AM Wow, so powerful. Congratulations on your win Olive. Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 21, 2014 at 7:24 AM thanks much Brenda.. :)!

Jan Allison December 17, 2014 at 5:57 PM dark descriptive and very powerful write Olive - congrats:-) Hugs jan x Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 18, 2014 at 8:16 AM Thanks much JAn.. :)! I appreciate your drop by.. :)! GBU hugs and mwah!

Dr.Ram Mehta December 17, 2014 at 5:16 AM Though dark but very meaningful write, congratulations on the win, Olive Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 18, 2014 at 8:13 AM Thank much Dr. Ram.. :) I appreciate you coming to visit my work and among all the people in soup you are the ever first to fave my work.. :)

Paul Callus December 8, 2014 at 12:41 PM This is very powerful and expressive Olive_eloi! When lust becomes uncontrollable the results can be most horrible and unpardonable. Fallen Venus is now "imploring death." hugs // paul Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 8, 2014 at 10:40 PM yes that's exactly what I want to portray here.. :) thanks PAul.. :)! hugs too.. :)

Liam Mcdaid December 8, 2014 at 7:24 AM this heart touching very beautifully penned olive Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 8, 2014 at 10:39 PM thanks much Liam.. :)! I appreciate this drop by.. :)!

James Fraser December 7, 2014 at 11:22 AM Deep and Dark, as if ones awaiting an Abyss to swallow them. Having read a few of your poems now Olive, some old, some new. Your writing is growing, and it's going to grow even more, James :) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser June 27, 2015 at 5:57 PM Yes I have been busy for awhile.. :) James Fraser December 8, 2014 at 1:30 PM Being busy does stop us from writing. Windows of opportunity will always pop up, it's making use of them if one wants, James :) Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 8, 2014 at 3:44 AM thanks much James.. :) i appreciate your every drop.. :) i have not have so much time to write these past days.. :) i have some poems stuck up but they are unfinished.. weeee.. seems i can;t post them unfinished.. :)

Sara Kendrick December 7, 2014 at 8:45 AM Interesting lines penned..I found it a deep work..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 8, 2014 at 3:30 AM thanks Much Sara.. :)! God bless you.. !

Andrea Dietrich December 6, 2014 at 8:25 PM It sounds like a horrible struggle ensuing!! I don't know well this story you are writing of but you did a good job of making it quite eerie!! Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 7, 2014 at 7:36 AM indeed Andie this what I want to portray.. :)!

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty December 6, 2014 at 8:47 AM Finitude fair Venus choked with disgust---very dissolute lover indeed.. Very bleak. Love XXX rajat Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser December 7, 2014 at 7:32 AM Thanks Rajat.. :) somehow I want to sketch a character that seems different to what I write always so this comes. :)!