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Dark Cradle--For Contest

Dark Cradle


white birch silhouette
stark against cold midnight black
cradling lunar face



6/26/2015

submitted to – Traditional Haiku – Poetry Contest
sponsor – Shadow Hamilton

Copyright © John Lawless | Year Posted 2015

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July 1, 2015 at 8:33 PM

A very nice concept tweak it a bit more so it says what you really saw if only in your minds eye- You need to have an action to join lines 1 & two - it would be the moon on a white tree which would stand out against the night but not the silhouette which is a shadow - that would be dark on dark. Light & Love

July 1, 2015 at 6:29 PM

loaded with incredibly descriptive images...wonderful John

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

July 1, 2015 at 4:21 AM

Congrats on ur awesome winning haiku John!

Poet Destroyer A

July 1, 2015 at 12:53 AM

John, congratulations on your Traditional Haiku win. Love LINDA

July 1, 2015 at 12:28 AM

Lovely skeletal imagery, John. One of the best Haikus I've seen in yonks. Congrats and regards, Viv

July 1, 2015 at 12:10 AM

Wonderful win... SK

June 30, 2015 at 7:59 PM

A beautiful haiku, John! Great imagery! Congrats on your placement in the contest! Love, Kim

June 30, 2015 at 6:06 PM

I like it, John

June 30, 2015 at 6:50 PM

Thanks for checking in James

June 30, 2015 at 4:49 PM

John, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve

June 30, 2015 at 4:16 PM

This is one of my favs in this contest, John! Absolutely beautiful. Congrats on a very deserved win. // paul

June 30, 2015 at 6:50 PM

Thank you Paul for stopping by to read and comment.

Carrie Richards

June 30, 2015 at 2:53 PM

This is so lovely, John !!! I can almost see it !! :)

June 30, 2015 at 6:47 PM

Thanks Carrie, appreciate your support.

Andrea Dietrich

June 30, 2015 at 2:04 PM

this is amazing, John. Congrats for being the winner list!

June 30, 2015 at 6:47 PM

Thanks Andrea, I have an old bent white birch in my neighbors yard to thank for the inspiration.

Shadow Hamilton

June 30, 2015 at 1:06 PM

you nailed the form John congrats on 4th place hugs

June 30, 2015 at 6:46 PM

Thank you Shadow, Haiku and I are engaged in a seemingly endless tong war. Appreciate you taking the time to sponsor the contest.

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