Dancing Jill

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Written - 29th October 2024

Jill Nursery Rhyme Contest - Sponsored by: Charles Messina

 Jill had so wished to join a ballet class
Her mom said that she could, when she was asked
Mom bought Jill ballet shoes and leotard
And Jill joined the class looking real smart.

Jill’s heart soared as she danced across the floor
Never had felt so elated before
She learnt to pirouette on tippy toes
Twirling and whirling, swift as the wind blows.

Mom was most delighted with Jill’s success
She knew that ballet for her was the best
Jill had been a timid shy girl before
Now she'd found confidence on the dance floor.

Dad was excited for his daughter too
He loved watching all the moves she could do
Jill dancing to music moved him to tears
He knew his daughter would dance through the years.

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 11/18/2024 12:31:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your lovely write. What a Great Ending you have here... Have a fun day writing away...............

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 11/18/2024 2:33:00 PM

Thank you Paula, I’m pleased you enjoyed the read. Enjoy your day writing away too… Beryl

Charles Messina

Date: 11/18/2024 2:10:00 AM

Enjoyable write, Beryl. Congratulations on your winning placement in my contest. Thanks for entering...Charlie

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 11/18/2024 2:31:00 PM

Thank you Charles, it was a pleasure to enter your contest… Beryl

Panagiota Romios

Date: 11/5/2024 12:13:00 AM

So well written, Beryl~ i anm glad my parebts let me start daning in first grade. My Dad was so proud of me. Mom spent a fortune on dance outfits, nothing was ready made. We went to the seamstress and they chose the outfits..my toe shoes were dyed to match my outfit, your poem is so real to me, I have to FAV it! Pangie

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 11/18/2024 2:30:00 PM

I danced when I was young, so did my sister, and like you had costumes and tap and ballet shoes, and danced on stage. Having been taken ill with a septic hip at twelve years old put paid to all of that. Thanks for your comments and the fave… Beryl

Michael Tor

Date: 10/31/2024 11:17:00 PM

Beryl this is heartfelt in reading. You really captured a families support for their daughter-precious. Thank you for sharing truly enjoyed reading...

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 11/18/2024 2:23:00 PM

Thank you Michael, so pleased you enjoyed the read… Beryl

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/31/2024 5:24:00 AM

Beryl, your lovely poem is an inspiring reminder that dreams do come true. Janice

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 11/18/2024 2:21:00 PM

Thank you Janice… Beryl

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/30/2024 1:17:00 AM

Your rhyming in this so cute a tale about dancing Jill, is spot on my friend, and the poem is touching. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Beryl Edmonds
Date: 10/30/2024 1:52:00 AM

Thank you dear Jennifer, I went to a dance class in my young days, till I went down with a septic hip and that ended my dreams of dancing on stage. Did that once only and it was wonderful. Blessings and hugs in return… Beryl