Dampened Light Threads

White fluffy clouds suspended By elaborate knotted Hammock, soft luxurious To touch, clouds dampen light threads

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Bl Devnath

Date: 9/4/2012 12:06:00 PM

Wonderful poem of imagination. Loved always, bl

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/4/2012 5:53:00 AM

I LOVE that you actually did the hammock in the sky. GReat job with your entry, Sara.

Joann Grisetti

Date: 9/3/2012 10:14:00 AM

I picture the soft fluffy clouds beginning to sprinkle rain at the end.

Russell Sivey

Date: 9/3/2012 9:07:00 AM

What a beautiful write my friend! I agree with you, I think that the one that you entered into Nette's contest might be your best choice for the contest! That doesn't mean that this poem is any worse than that one, just different...maybe just not Nette's style or what she's looking for! This is a truly wonderful write, especially the first line, "White fluffy clouds suspended" like the other poem, leaves me in daydreams of my past! A wondrous trip...Fantastic piece, Great Work!!