Dame

Can only smoke remain visible to thee?
I arraign the distance carved out in gashes.
Proximity charred me to ashes,
Left me to burn, yet never felt the flame.
One glare from the dazzling dame,
To burn one's own nest, how absurd!
Blazed my heart, that sunbird.

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Jan Allison

December 27, 2014 at 6:24 PM

intense and beautifully penned:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A

December 27, 2014 at 12:45 AM

MALIK, Congratulations!!! Thank you for supporting my contest. Sorry, it took this long to post the winning poems. Stop by my latest blog "A Woman's Gift" if you'd like. Enjoy life and the Holidays. :) Always ~LINDA~

Doris Jamoner

September 29, 2014 at 1:42 PM

Short but full of intensity. I like the way you write ^^

Teddy Kimathi

September 26, 2014 at 5:00 AM

A wonderful piece to start my afternoon! Congrats for having your work featured in PS homepage! :-)

Ma Yaseen

September 26, 2014 at 5:24 AM

Thanks Teddy for your visit and kind remarks..

Laura Breidenthal

September 8, 2014 at 4:29 PM

Your thoughts and contemplations are original and beautiful... I really enjoyed reading this small verse, so full of meaning. Those last two lines...the entirety of this poem really...just flow so nicely... Keep up the amazing work. Always, Laura

Ma Yaseen

September 9, 2014 at 1:34 AM

Thanks a lot Laura, for appreciating my work.It boosts the morale. Hope to see you always nearby here. Stay blessed.. Malik

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

September 5, 2014 at 7:22 AM

Intriguing write..:)I like your first four lines you pictured one melancholic scene then followed with a tragic scene somehow... WARM WELCOME to poetrysoup...:)!

Ma Yaseen

September 6, 2014 at 5:31 AM

Thanks a lot Olive:) for your appreciation, it will help a lot indeed. thanks for welcoming me, i hope to get inputs in future also from a viewer like you. Stay blessed Olive.

Ma Yaseen

September 4, 2014 at 10:57 PM

Thanks Dear Anne for your warm and appreciating words.

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 4, 2014 at 7:54 AM

- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup,Malik - I choose your first great written poem- You write skillfully - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- Be kind and keep PoetrySoup as a haven -(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Ma Yaseen

September 4, 2014 at 10:53 PM

Thanks a lot dear Anne, your warm and appreciating words are highly influential. stay blessed

Ma Yaseen

September 3, 2014 at 11:19 PM

Thanks Pandita and Poet Destroyer A for your nice reflections.

Pandita Sietesantos

September 3, 2014 at 8:17 PM

Hi Malik, what an excellent write this is! A warm welcome to PoetrySoup and happy writings! Pandita

Ma Yaseen

September 3, 2014 at 11:18 PM

Thanks Dear Pandita Sa nchez

Poet Destroyer A

September 3, 2014 at 10:37 AM

Malik, this is wonderful and romantic, in a passionate way, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the community. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I'm looking forward to following you and your poetry:) Here's the link to the contest page. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/ <---~Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@

Ma Yaseen

September 3, 2014 at 5:52 AM

Blazed in the last line. typing error

Dame

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