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This is for my son. This is a recounting of his first-ever snorkeling experience, and the story is completely true right down to the specific detail, including the order of the creatures we saw.  He was thrilled, and I was glad his first impression would be the foundation of a lifelong love and respect for the ocean.

I went out with my dad today, to swim beneath the sea. He took me by the hand and said ‘just stay right next to me’. We stepped out to the water and we swam out on a wave, I was nervous and excited but I tried to be so brave. I grabbed his hand and looked below, my mask against my face, I floated like an astronaut, just like in outer space. At first I saw the ocean floor, with sand and rocks and reef, and then my eyes beheld a world that seemed beyond belief… Coral making strange new shapes with lots of little spaces, and I could see all sorts of things were living in those places. I saw some little Tiger Barbs, swimming ‘round an eel, I couldn’t wait to tell my mom how great it made me feel. Next, we swam to where the water started getting deep, We came upon a turtle and we woke him from his sleep. He turned to take a look at us and slowly swam away, I hope I get to see him when I dive again some day. There were so many creatures, so many things to see, I forgot that I was swimming and simply felt so free. I saw a pair of Goatfish, found a Trigger Fish, or two, I saw a shrimp of red and white, deep in the ocean blue. I got a little cold and asked my dad to go to shore. He turned around and headed back and said to watch for more. I was thinking we had seen it all when I finally got my wish; to my surprise we came across a great big Puffer Fish! He lumbered out of hiding and we followed him a while. I wonder if he watched me back and if he saw me smile. Well, we finally made it back to shore and on the sandy beach, Excited that the ocean was no longer out of reach. I can’t wait to go again, to see the fish below, I think I’ll ask my friends next time if they would like to go.

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Date: 6/10/2018 5:36:00 PM
You are very enjoyable to read Cary. You have a magic ability to make the phrasing and rhyme sound so natural.
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Cary Snowden
Date: 6/11/2018 12:33:00 AM
Thanks again, Robert. It has been a pleasure to read your comments this evening. Thank you for taking the time. -Cary
Date: 5/25/2018 6:45:00 PM
What a wonderful experience for your son, and now to have your poem with its poetic imagery! If you all get PBS TV and have a chance to watch "The Blue Planet," it would be fun for you.
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Date: 5/26/2018 12:33:00 AM
Thanks for the note, Sunlite! The Blue Planet is one of our favorite go-to programs, and it warms my heart to find my kids watching it as one of their preferred treats. Thanks for the tip, and thank you again for the note! -Cary