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Crimson Tide

As he paddled out on the ocean waves He could barely hear the clamor Of those shouting to him from the shore They were shouting SHARK! SHARK! SHARK! Oblivious to the grave danger he was in He kept going further out to sea Then suddenly..... he saw the dorsal fin But it was too late.... the great white bit down hard on his leg The water turned blood red as he tried To stay afloat, then the merciless predator returned.... It seemed to be over in a matter of seconds..... The people on the shore gasped in horror He had lost both legs but was still alive! It was a miracle that he survived He was quickly taken ashore and rushed off for medical treatment A surfer doing something he craved Almost met his end on the ocean waves

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012




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Date: 8/12/2012 7:06:00 PM
Joseph, this is such a moving piece; so vivid that I feel like I'm right at the scene of the event.
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Date: 7/27/2012 9:50:00 AM
Excellent write here...this story was amazingly told..love it from start to finish..the imagery is crazy good!!!!
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Joseph May
Date: 7/27/2012 1:58:00 PM
thanks for those uplifting comments G
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Date: 7/27/2012 9:51:00 AM
Smoothly done Joseph!!

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