Criminals: Part 4-- Fiction

The ware house was hot and humid
rob located the crate on the upper level
right next to his own; he asked our boss to lease 
for an employee discount.
Before we left work earlier he charged the batterie
for the old fork lift, we pulled down the crate filled
with our own little dreams inside
We knew axactly how to open it because we sealed
it tight, like no one would ever reveal the contents but
the owner.
A rush of air poured out of the crate like a wave from
the cool ocean, bubbled wrapped and given "extra"
special attention for the long wait
The owners are in Florida enjoying the sun
We are in the ware house enjoying their goods
I heard they weren't to kind to some
Ones who had not trusted their maids until their return
Filled with old greats of art, including a few rear vases
 molded by the beautiful hands of Tiffany  :) To Be Continued
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Brown Avatar
August 4, 2010 at 5:44 AM
Dude, you are off the chain.
Sepulvado Anderson Avatar
August 3, 2010 at 9:48 PM
Love the imagery and creativity. Look forward to reading the rest of the story. Have a great day! Scarlett
A   Avatar
August 3, 2010 at 9:06 PM
Well done on the continued story, this one was nice. Looking forward to reading your continued story..Just drop a line when part 5 is in. Have a nice one,..p.d.
Mossburg Avatar
July 22, 2010 at 6:25 PM
and the story continues. You have a very creative and vivid imagination. Thanks for sharing this with us. Very entertaining. Steve
Segal Avatar
July 21, 2010 at 6:45 AM
Very creative! thank you for your comment, love Simone
Kendrick Avatar
July 21, 2010 at 3:32 AM
Mysterious saga that you have going..Sara
Keen Avatar
July 20, 2010 at 10:56 PM
you write great stories. i love the crimnal saga you have going, great write!
Brumley Avatar
July 20, 2010 at 5:42 PM
Have you ever thought about writing a short story? And don't you just hate the character limitations on the submissions? I'm enjoying the story, I hope it's not too long though.:)
Sweetheart Avatar
July 20, 2010 at 4:39 PM
Super Diamond Rich.. reminds me of a setting from Criminal Minds.. my fav TV show.. u have the gift and the flow my friend.. waiting anxiously for the continuation.. with luv..
Flaherty Avatar
July 20, 2010 at 4:27 PM
Hi Diamond Your name brings a smile to my face as i have a mate called dai and his nickname is diamond geezer . Reminds me of pulp fiction the suitcase where you never know what the contents are. Good stuff Cheers
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