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Creamy White Dappled With Gray

Magnolia blossoms creamy white dappled with gray Sway the day from foggy veil sprinkled across way The contrast creamy white against waxy green leaves Adds beauty brightening life upon summer's humid eve Unfinished and may never be finished... Trying to do Hexameter: Twelve syllables per line with it reading unstressed/ stressed... Very difficult to have to look up every word since I would not pronounce these words like they are suppose to be accented..

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Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 8/11/2014 3:21:00 AM

Amazing imagery write. Adore magnolias Well penned my friend. Enjoyed . Tfs

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/10/2014 8:13:00 PM

I agree with John, write it out then go back to edit line per line. Much easier task that way IMHO. What you have already is extremely good so the foundation awaits the finished house!

Joe Maverick

Date: 8/10/2014 1:38:00 AM

I like it a lot Sara, finished or unfinished hope you are well..'

M. L. Kiser

Date: 8/9/2014 5:56:00 PM

I love magnolias; my neighbor's have a tree and sitting on our patio, in the evening breezes, is quite a sensory experience. Well done and thanks for reading my poetry..

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 8/9/2014 2:04:00 PM

Beautiful lines sketching mood and filling the colors of Nature which fills our life form dawn to dust. It is always a pleasure to read your Poems. Love and best wishes always....Ravindra K Kapoor

John Lawless

Date: 8/9/2014 12:34:00 PM

Sara, a suggestion - just write the poem and then edit it to conform to the syllable count. I have found that trying to edit at the same time as I write I often loose the intent of the phrases, or the whole idea drifts away. I too would like to see this completed.

Jan Allison

Date: 8/9/2014 10:50:00 AM

I would love to see this finished but the imagery in it is amazing so it stands so well as it is - fabulous and i adore magnolias - sadly mine hasn't flowered this years:-( Hugs Jan xxx