Crazy Love

She looked at him with tear filled eyes
and said she couldn't take it anymore.
She said I'm sorry, but I have to go.
She walked out and left him alone.

Now he's scared, doesn't know where you are.
Didn't think you would go real far.

He's calling all over town
as he's driving all around.
How could this be?
Where can she be?

It's almost midnight 
and he's worried to death.
Wondering if you're alright
he doesn't know 
she booked a flight.

But now she's scared of being alone
she's so scared 
she doesn't have her phone.
How could this be?
Will he come and save me?




~~ Lol I know this may need work, I just wrote the first words that came to mind and just now as I typed this. Let me know what needs work, any suggestions?


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Date: 9/29/2014 7:11:00 PM
I'm not qualified to critique ones form, but i can say you have inspired me to write a rhyming version of your beautiful poem. If you care to see it just click on my icon. PS My suggestion Is keep writing----it's good but gets better.
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